Like No Romeo And Juliet

Going weird and haywire
Like wide wild strawberries
After seeing a damsel in choir
Joseph felt stuck fast like tree bees

He was an usher in Church
Feeling his adrenaline pumping
As the inamorata sings with no smirch
He sensed his legs uncontrollably clinging

He followed her after service
Having a word with the maestro
In an endearing smooth-spoken blitheness
That was kindly responded in a silver-tongued whoa

Brazen like a whiz-bang
He spoke his mind flawlessly
And she smiled with no hissing harangue
Falling on him like one caught in no spiky gee

Oh, her name was Josephine
And he, Joseph like no careless bearing
They found love transcending the day’s passing time
As they tended happiness with joyful surpassing grapevine

They ended like no Romeo and Juliet
Dying in love’s cruel-some sight and night
But like two love-birds destined for eternity’s light
In a way words can hardly tell in an excellent enchanting write

55 thoughts on “Like No Romeo And Juliet” by innoalifa (@innoalifa)

  1. Wheee! The first to comment. Beautiful lines…reminds me of my days as a chorister.

    1. @uzywhyte
      Thanks a lot for reading
      commenting and commending

      I’m glad you related with it
      Giving life to it………….lolzzzzzzzzzzzzz!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1

  2. Ehn!! Me am scared now, I sing at church one usher might be eyeing me already.

    First stanza I was already smiling…..such a story expected just the best from u @innoalifa this is so lovey lovey lol. …abi u don dey eye Josephine 4 church???

    1. @ufuomaotebele mellifluous thanks for stopping by……
      eyeing Josephine abi?
      She alone knows what’s on ground LMAO…………

      1. She lucky oooo lol…….ur post always surprise me sha……out of no where u post dem.

        1. @ufuomaotebele or you wan take her place? Lolzzzzzzzzzzz!!!!!!!!!!!1

          1. Ahhh I won’t dare

  3. Nice one @innoalifa but you had me checking out your Shakespearean English *can’t watch* … @uzywhyte I use to sing too..but no comments on the possibility of being eyed by a Joseph @ufuomaotebele…it always happens. Choir or anywhere else.

    1. Shakespearean English ke? I’m happy seeing three erstwhile choristers: @ufuomaotebele, @uzywhyte & @imaniking relating with this piece…………. sincerely thank y’all for joining my poetic train…………

      1. @innoalifa Maybe we could start a reunion group. Well, choristers don’t stop singing, they chase other talents.

        1. @imaniking so true from a sublime heart – true singers just never stop singing, beginning a reunion group is not a bad idea at all………. :)

  4. Beautiful piece of poetry… These lots are my favorites always!

    1. Favourites ke? That’s good to know, thanks a bunch @clemency!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

  5. The poet is inlove, lol.
    Well done @innoalifa.

    1. Thanks noble head wordsmith (@olajumoke) for reading and commenting……… love has been the inspiration of the greatest literary bits and pieces lolzzzzzzzzzzzzzz!

  6. love tangle in church ….. nice one bro!

    1. It happens everywhere o, whether in church or in the market, whether in school or in the bank, everywhere secular and sacred. Thanks for stopping by @Olushademi……………..

  7. Very beautiful poem.

    1. @ameenaedrees I appreciate your reading and remarking…

  8. Nice one bro….your writtings inspires me alot….i hope i can get to learn more from you sir

    1. @lakemacaulay
      you’re forever welcome
      for here is our home
      as we keep learning
      bettering our writing

      thanks a great deal for reading and commenting……………………

  9. okayyyyy??? Where is the conclusion? Nice one though.

  10. Whoa!!!!!!!!! The conclusion abi? Mentally construct it in eternity’s light………. Thanks for reading @sambrightomo……………

  11. Plenty big English o. I’m not a poet poet like that so as long as it sounds nice, I like it. I have to say I didn’t get some of your comparisons though.
    By the way I didn’t know you are a dude!

    1. @Lordjosh
      understanding poetry
      is not just like lottery
      it engages the mind
      that words gives signs………….

  12. Hiahn! Abeg oh!
    So we’ll be there singing to God (was in the church choir too) and some dude will be sitting (or standing) there ” feeling his legs un controllably clinging” abi? Chai, una ehn…there is God oh.
    Nice piece. You dey yarn no be small (at all your big words and similes n stuff)…I’m glad they didn’t end up as Romeo and Juliet sha, in this their chorister-usher whirlwind romance. @innoalifa

    1. Chai, in their chorister-usher whirlwind romance lolzzzzzzz. Thanks @kwiksie for reading and commenting…………

  13. kay (@kaymillion)

    wonderful but got me wondering if u wer robbed of your heartbeat *stolen from @ dees-hive* in church @innoalifa

    1. @dees-hive‘s abi? I appreciate your reading @kaymillion……….

  14. kay (@kaymillion)

    wonderful!!………….. just got me wondering if u wer robbed of your heartbeat *stolen from @ dees-hive* in church @innoalifa

    1. Where is @dees-hive sef? Thank you so much for reading and commenting @dees-hive………………..

  15. This kind of thing happens. Match made in church…lol.
    Nice one bro.

    1. @Chime221 thank you so much for reading and relating with it………………… match made in church abi?……. lolzzzzzzzzzzzz!!!!!!!!!!!

  16. O-Money (@Omoniyi-Adeshola)

    @innoalifa, in many ways you make me think of what the lovechild of Patrick Obahiagbon and Femi Fani Kayode would be like. You are quite fluent with words, and I know you’ll have a rather close relationship with your thesaurus, and maybe an app like Verses, RhymeNow or Poets Pad on your gadget/PC . You just love words – and that is nice. This poem too tells a nice story.

    1. Whoa!!!!! Like Patrick Obahiagbon and Femi Kani Kayode abi…lolzzzzzzzzzzz
      Thanks a bunch @Omoniyi-Adeshola for gravitating here and commenting with tremendous acceleration and alacrity…………

      1. O-Money (@Omoniyi-Adeshola)

        @Innoalifa, see? that alone confirms my suspicions…lmao. Well done

        1. @Omoniyi-Adeshola I sincerely appreciate your affirmation and confirmation of my assertion…. lolzz………

  17. okay i had to get a grip of myself after going thru every comment, so as to make mine (*i was laffing really hard at @innoalifa responses*) i may not have *gravitated here but i will comment with tremendous acceleration and alacrity*…*smiles* we have 4 choristers @kwiksie @uzywhyte @ufuomaoteble and @imaniking and i know for sure that @innoalifa is our usher sorry our Joseph…just trying to find out who the Josephine is (will the Real Josephine please stand up!)
    – Back to the Poem- good rhymes, not so into technical details, so i’ll speak solely on how much i understood and enjoyed it…had to grab my dictionary to confirm and check out some words… so yes that worked…message was clear but meaning per structure of the poem was lost in some few instances like you paid more attention to rhyming than to keeping to the plot of the story(or poem)….
    i enjoyed myself. welldone

    1. @dees-hive, thanks a lot for reading and commenting. I’m glad you enjoyed it but your hasty conjecturing and generalizing broke my jaw because I couldn’t control myself laughing out loud. Anyways, the Josephine isn’t interested in publicity, so she may just be laughing loud at the whole comments here.

      @dees-hive, your observations, suggestions, corrections, and recommendations are held dear to my heart. I’ve just been wondering where @Afronuts have been…………

  18. so, how/why did they die?

    1. @h0n3ydr0p5 Whoa! Thanks for reading and commenting.
      Neither Joseph nor Josephine is said to have died for they ended like no Romeo and Juliet who died in love’s cruel-some sight and night. They continued, like two love-birds destined for eternity’s light in a way words can hardly tell in an excellent enchanting write…

  19. Painting magical scenarios in our minds right, where everything happens smoothly and no dark spots are encountered…nice @innoalifa very nice…Thank you for briefly taking my mind out of the gloom that rents the air. Between won’t i join the choir like this…seems like all the hot boys are looking at choristers o…lol

    1. @ayobare, I’m elated my words took you off the doom and gloom of everyday life. Joining the choir isn’t a bad idea o lolzzzzzzzz!!!!!1

  20. oya o, u don fall helplessly in love like romeo, and hope sis josephine is the julie. amazing piece sir, i believe you pieces

    1. @oxymoron93, I appreciate your reading, commenting and commending……………..

  21. The subject of love always generates a lot of emotions…and this poem is no different.

    These are my observations:

    Big words loosely stringed together equals to rambling and this poem came dangerously close to that. words like ‘smirch’, ‘harangue’ have meanings which do not really fit into the poem but were used because they fit into the rhyme scheme.
    pray tell, how does one sing without stain, dirt or contamination? (words which smirch means)

    the poem’s greatest strength is the rhyme scheme, which was consistent throughout the verses. use of imagery too was good but was overdone sometimes. ‘legs uncontrollably clinging’ for instance. clinging to what? when a man is swooned by a woman, the descriptive term used is ‘weak at the knee’ because that is exactly what happens when you ‘swoon’.
    other examples abound which on closer look, you will detect.

    he spoke to her in an endearing smooth spoken blitheness? thoughtless and without heed? carefree and without worry? and she lapped it up? now that is interesting…

    well done man…love is a beautiful thing!

    1. Hehehe … I would call this love CIA Love in Church.

      First, I should say my attempt at constructive criticism no longer needs to be voiced as @topazo has spoken my mind. But moving from that, I should still say, that I enjoyed the musicality of the poem–the plot, too.

      Nice one, @innoalifa. Keep improving your art.

  22. @topazo, thanks a lot for reading and commenting; your observations, corrections and suggestions are well-noted.

    1. @chemokopi & @topazo, a million thanks to you two for reading, commenting and encouraging.

  23. mendel martha (@ihenyengladysusile)

    well i never doubted your capabililities i mean,you would always comment on a post with a poem,gush who does that…………………………………………………..the thing is you are good at what you do.

    1. @ihenyengladysusile, oh, I appreciate
      beyond my little world of words
      your reading and commenting
      hoping to see and read
      more of you

  24. @innoalifa,
    Ending like no Romeo and Juliet is sweet relieve to the hopeful mind.
    You’ve shown once again that love stories can be much more beautiful without being tragic. That’s fantastic!

    And for that part; “He sensed his legs uncontrollably clinging”, that is rare, and could only have come from personal experience. lol

    1. @Levuz hahahaha! Personal experience now. Thanks a million for reading, commenting and commending.

      1. @innoalifa, always always welcome.

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