Voyeur: In the Light.

I hear her wary steps in the dark; a strike from her makes me hot, then she drops me and makes her way to a corner of the shanty that is home to her and the baby, while I watch with fiery eyes. In the corner lies a pink plastic bath for children and she stoops to check on the baby; he snores silently, sleeping. She looks on and her eyes is veiled by sadness as tears gather to fall, then she sniffs, draws in a long breath and stands wearily. She glances at the door like one who expects a visitor, satisfied that whoever she is expecting is not there, makes her way to the end of the space that serves as her kitchen. Squatting, she creates a racket while scraping off dinner that is plastered to the near-empty pot and slowly she eats the charred offering. Then a knock comes, followed by two lighter raps on the zinc door and she stands to answer, weariness dogging each step.

A man walks in – belly first, and then I see his head that shines even in the dim light. She locks the door and walks to the bed, while he looks at her backside like one lost. His lips part and he licks them as he drops the polythene bag in his hand by the door, takes off his shirt and follows her like a lost sheep.
She fiddles with her wrapper till it drops, like his jaw does at the sight of her nakedness. He grabs the swollen breasts in his hands and squeezes them till she slaps the hands away, then he shoves her onto the tired mattress. She goes down and doesn’t make a noise till his lips clamp on a breast; it is then she shakes her head from side to side, almost throwing him off-balance and I can see the dribble of his saliva that lands on her neck. He says something that I can’t hear and gets off her to remove his shorts; then he climbs, and widens her legs with his knee placed in between and forces his way in. She doesn’t scream but I sense her pain by the way she bites on her lower lip and how her eyes close momentarily; they open again to rest on me and for the first time tonight, I sense her self-pity. Meanwhile, he moves back and forth for some time and then a noise that seems like he is choking, fills the small room. He rolls off her, wipes at his penis and wears his shorts. She grits her teeth and stands, then speaks for the first time;

“Oga Landlord, shey this one na the rent for the next month?”

“Yes. No need to worry for dat one. I effen carry food and moni come,” he goes to pick the polythene bag that stands gallantly by the door and offers it to her.
She thanks him as she takes it and then a cry breaks the night’s silence – it is the child’s. She waves the man away from the room and goes to the plastic bath to pick the howling child. Holding him close to her chest, she casts a pleading look at me to stay with them a little longer and I oblige. She looks steadily into my eye as if it holds the wisdom of Solomon to lead her back to the right path. I look at her and I can see something that looks like resolve, maybe I am imagining that glint in her eyes and the slight straightening of formerly stooped shoulders. I try to reflect what I see in her, so she can feed off on the inner strength only I can sense in her. I can’t bear to leave them now; I have to go with her to the bathroom so I can feast properly on her body as she washes it clean of the filth of meaningless sex and her condition. She looks at the money on the bed, while the baby drags on the breast that holds the milk she had saved for him. She croons to him and the tears that had earlier threatened, begin to fall, as do my hot waxy tears. She places the baby into his makeshift bed when sleep steals him away from her and then she comes towards me.
I shiver at the look in her eyes; is she angry that I always see her at the lowest ebb?
I only want to help! I try to tell her but she she looks at my white, slender frame of wax sadly, and shapes her lips as if to give me a kiss, instead the breeze from them make me shiver and throws the room into darkness. She knocks me off my perch and I feel the gloom slink back into the room. I know she will light me one more time tonight, and then I will shine brighter to dispel the gloom, and light her path.

***
To-Do.
1) Please can anyone help me find ‘U’? I think I lost him lipogrammatically* in this piece. Find U.

2) Who/what is the narrotor of this piece?

I sabi say na JAMB question, attempt all questions o. Lol!

$ß.



98 thoughts on “Voyeur: In the Light.” by Bubbllinna (@sibbylwhyte)

  1. Interesting piece. Na candle dey watch dem with that one yellow eye of its na, shea I get am? Oya send me my recharge card.

    Thumbs up Sib. Unorthodox style u used. It works for me.

    1. Hey You! @hymar. Why do you have to be such a smarty-pants ehn? Now you done gone and given everyone an expo… Take your 50% jare.
      Thanks for reading, liking and commenting. I appreciate. $ß.

  2. Fascinating!
    Hymar answered the second question, Sib. As for d second question… hmmm… Found the ‘U’.
    “She doesn’t scream bUt I hear… ”

    Well done, Bubblina

  3. Fascinating!
    Hymar answered the second question, Sib. As for d first question… hmmm… Found the ‘U’.
    “She doesn’t scream bUt I hear… ”

    Well done, Bubblina

    1. Ah! All these hawk-eyed individuals on NS sef.
      @mimiadebayo. Take 50%, when Jamb marked your papers, did they share marks for you and another person? Hehehe.
      Thanks for reading, and playing the game. Appreciate it. $ß.

  4. There is also a u in sqUatting

    1. Ehn? @hymar. You want to get all the marks by force ba? No way!
      Oya take 20% extra… Now you got 70%. No submit another answer script o. Hian!

  5. This definitely worked for me… Good job :)
    @hymar is right… The voyeur is a candle.
    Besides the ‘U ‘ @hymar and @mimiadebayo found, there’s also a ‘U’ here: I try to tell her bUt she looks at my white, slender frame…
    I’m not sure if the one in the title counts ;)

    1. @Olaedo… I am glad it did o…
      You people are doing copy-copy. Hymar carry your seat and move front!
      You did guess work. You na sharp girl. Take 50% jare. C na pass mark. Hehehe.
      Thanks for reading, and writing the Bubb-Jamb. I appreciate. $ß.

      1. I no gree o! E be like say tha voyeUr suppose score me something, abi? Moreover, 50% no be pass mark for my school o. Ask @hymar naa.

        The Bubb-Jamb was fun to write, jare. The last paragraph exposed the peeping Tom and all it took to decipher the first question was scanning every word for a ‘U ‘ … Whew!

        1. @olaedo. Na your real mark be that na. I am a lectureress who has not been involved in runz. I can’t fit to start with you na.
          C no be pass mark? Gbege don burst for ya head be dat na. Hehehe.

          1. Madam Lectureress, abeg naa. If to say na C all your colleagues score me, my mama for flog me well well for house o! No be runs matter be this… I dey sit for front of class o!…As scholar consign ;)

            Well, as e be say na you get yam, get hoe and even cutlass join, I don gree… You win this round.
            I dey wait your next exam.

            1. Ah!…. * whispers* I added a little something, when they paste the result you will see it… Don’t go and start telling people that I helped you o. Hehehe.

  6. I was too engrossed to find the U (s) but am sure Hymar and Mimi have found them all.
    I thought the narrator was her dead husband/baby’s father at first. I had to have a second read and saw the hints I missed, so I guess Hymar must be right.
    This will linger in my mind for a while Bubbllinna.
    Great work.

    1. @olaJumoke mi… You are a very good student. It’s your type that does not turn their necks to giraffe in exam halls. You were engrossed!
      Oya take 20% for writing your name and submitting blank answer script. Lmao!
      Thanks dear, for reading and commenting. Appreciate. $ß.

      1. 20%? Wait, * takes a while to do the sums* that is not even a pass Professor Bubbllinna.
        I am usually good with things like this. Lol
        @hymar, just take your 70% and be happy. Now, I wish I had cheated and copied your answer.
        Welldone clever man.

        1. @Olajumoke…Next time? It’s because you are one of ‘Our Angels’, that’s why you couldn’t copy na. Hehe.

  7. Wow!! I love this piece like mad..

    It just highlights the common trend in our society where landlord takes advantage of young single parents who have no means of livelyhood and can’t afford the to pay rent.

    1. @kingobozy. I’m mighty glad that you did… And you got the koko in this long-thing.
      But bros, wait o. You just enter exam hall to warm bench? Wey your Jamb answer script? Hian!
      Thanks for reading and commenting. $ß.

  8. Bravo!
    Always you, great and farcinating, bringing that unique hands and styles to the fores of fiction. I like the story and the way it was narrated.

    I no fit answer that JAMB question o! Maybe next year sha but for now I agree with every answer @hymar to be specific.

    Weldone @sibbylwhyte

    1. Choi! @basittjamiu. You dey make my head swell like puff-puff, abeg make pesin no chop am comot.
      I am glad that you liked everything about this.

      But wait o. You, your case worse. How can you tell JAMB that because they set hard questions, you will come back. You go become everlasting customer here o. Lol.
      Thanks for checking in Bas. Appreciate your kind words. $ß.

  9. This is more than cool, bubblina. Great job. Like Olajumoke, I missed the hints at first. I’ll say hymar’s got a really sharp brain.
    Great job, Bubblina.

    1. @praize. I am glad you thought it cool. I also see you were engrossed like Jumoke. Oya take your 20% for reading the question. Hehe.
      And that hymar, fear am. Dat boy na the Most Wanted Machinery on Bubb-Jamb list of mercenaries…
      Thanks praize. I appreciate. $ß.

  10. Lwkmd, poor @Olajumoke, n @Basittjamiu, na person like una dey chop dem school fees for school. Madam Sib, no vex, my i-too-know never see cure, but the mark sha, u fine me ba? 70 per cent na ojoro jo. N @olaedo s ryt o, for awa alma mata, dat mark u give am no fit hold water o.

    @Praize, which sharp brain? If I hear

    1. Lol! Shey dem chop dia registration fee join sef?
      No worry, I get the cure, na to pound that your big @hymar ellistic head inside mortar. I-too-know go become I-no-know.

      *whispers* my hand dey scratch me wella. You sabi say Bubb 101 fit delay ya graduation? Oya shake body, @olaedo. Hehehe.

      1. @Sib, chop them registration fee join? Haha, that’s a good one. For all we know maybe them chop them transport fare sef. Na im make them no fit come venue write that your er…Bubb-Jamb

      2. I don dey shake body for here since o, sotey I wan resemble person wey get chills :P
        You mean say you never notice?
        That should get me an upgrade, abi? Na we we o ;)

        1. My sister @olaedo… I bin think say na Alingo and etighi you bin dey dance, na im make I dey look you since na. Lol.

  11. @Kingobozy, wow, she owned u with tht o. Benchwrmer? So Lolestest

  12. Laffin so hard. Me mercenary? Na ASUU-induced joblessness cause am na. Wetin sef? D tin no hard, goat wey your mama send u pick dey look u for face and u dey there dey find cockroach for ground

  13. @Hymar! Lemme o… I no wan LMAO. If I laugh am out because of you, you go pay o… Heehn…!

  14. Me,I no gree oo. Professor! I knew it was candle na.@Hymar just beat me to the answer. Abeg add mark for me oo.

    1. @mimiadebayo. Na first pass, first get mark na. You gatz to be sharper next time, that @hymar guy na better machine.

  15. @Mimiadebayo, go siddon joor. You want make that wicked lectuRess cut my mark just to share am with greedy you.

  16. infact na copy he copy me sef. Miss Lecturer abeg do justice oo.

  17. @Hymar na true I dey talk joor. No be copy u copy me?
    Lecturess oo come settle dis matter! Hian!

    1. Oya @hymar, I know you loff @mimiadebayo. You know there is love in sharing Bubb-Jamb marks na. Do your thing.

      1. @Sibbylwhyte, loff? No be only loff na. Bring some loaves join. I tell u say I like bread gbo?

  18. Hmmm…a style I love—the thinking-talking–participating object. It’s refreshing to read something as this. I can imagine the candle expressing its sympathy with hot tears of wax as one of life’s unfortunate forms of exploitation occurs right in front of it. Excellent descriptions.

    Well done, Bubbllinna. Keep improving your art!

    *I siddon here dey thank all of una for the many many expo wey una don troway come my syd. Una too try..hehehe*

    1. @Chemokopi. Kai. You sabi English well well o. Na dicktionari I been take use understand this your grammer. Thank you Sah…
      I am really glad that you found this refreshing.

      Aha! Oga Chemo. Ha fa U na? So na style you use they wait make your pikins dem smuggle answer give you? See as the head of your pen don disfigure finish. Oya! Carry your chair go front. Lmao!

      Thanks for reading, dear. Appreciate. $ß.

      1. Hehehe…Bubbllinna, na you sabi dat one o. @Hymar don call me abgaya join sef. I gree o. Me na just the candle for your tori I be o. But in fact, if you look am well well eh, I be de light of de worl’! Hymar, you hear? Hehehe…

        1. @chemokopi. You are the Oga candle at the shiniest* top! Chop knuckle jare. Infact you can commandeer all of @Hymar and @mimiadebayo marks! Lol.

          1. What? U wanna dash him my marks? #Dialling Femi Falana#

            Ama sue sue

            1. Hahahah..I don dieeeee!

              1. Ehn? What do you mean? you cannot categorically say that… Femi Fa? Abeg na? This is where I feed my extended family from. *Tender judgement with mercy* na…na abeg.

                1. For yo mind, you be provider? Make I forgive you sha…Lols

  19. Lol. @chemokopi, you be agbaya. See site monitor wey no know book. Tufia. Nemesis go visit soon. And @ mimiadebayo wey say I copy am, if na true, why you con suddenly dey wear face like woman for labour when Lecturess send me go front to siddon.

    1. Hymar o! No make me begin wear pampers abeg. You talk say Mimi keep face like woman wey dey labour? Kai! You are incorrigble, but that’s good for us all.

  20. She send u go front because she see say u dey copy me! @Hymar No lie oo!
    Oya come make we go share that mark…

  21. @Sibbylwhyte, you too wicked joor. Na me first answer n u gimme 50. We both found a U n u gave her 50. For hers n 20 for mine. Now u dey cajole say make I share marks.

    Okay o, lemme prove the love of God has been shed abroad in my heart by the Holy Spirit, @mimiadebayo, take, I dash you one and half of my marks.

    Winks.

  22. I really enjoyed reading this. When it comes to writing, you’re a perfect ten. I envy…

    1. @Queennobo. I am so so glad you enjoyed this. This lady here is so not a size ten… We are trying to get there… So, do not get green. You think I have forgotten Chasing pink dreams ehn? That was a storied Project Fame na.

      No be because of say you be Queen, na im make you no go answer my Bubb-Jamb Question o. Abi, Queen go come back next year? Hian!

      Thanks for reading and commenting. $ß.

      1. Abeg @queennobo tell her o! Abeg Bubbllinna remind her o!

        1. Lol. Like two-way traffic.

  23. Stingy ko! @Hymar You get 70 u dash me one and half… ole like u!
    I go show u.Shey we go meet for dat joint tomorrow? No worry. I go bring my boys.
    Hehehehe.
    *runs away *

    1. Don’t worry @mimiadebayo, I will bring my trusted weapons and some of these fistfighters from Satan’s Ghetto.

      P.S; carry ambulance come. Just in case yo boiz need a ‘little’ help afterwards

      1. Lmao! Mimi, dem no send you message o. Bow leg is better than none which is what would happen if those im Satan boiz catch you.

  24. 3 ‘U’s

    1. Doesn’t scream bUt
    2. SqUatting
    3. bUt she looks at my white

    Question two. Candle.
    Hint. A strike from her makes me hot
    Hot waxy tears.
    Breeze from her make me shiver and throws the room in darkness
    I know she will light me one more time tonight…

    Nice story. I thoroughly enjoyed it. Not surprising seeing as it is coming from one of NS finest..

    Welldone

    1. Kai! Who is this guy? @topazo.
      See clean answer script! Everything dey very articulate…no be all de fowl handwriting wen I don dey read since morning!
      Oya take 75%, (5 marks na for dress-code, see as im picture dey neat – very sharp guy with shirt and tie!)
      Let’s see if there’s a best student yet to come.
      Tip: @hymar, is probably gon’ come fist-fighting with you… So get ready. Lol.

      Chai! That your last sentence swell my head small, but me, I am still a learner o. Appreciate your checking in, Topaz. $ß.

      1. @Sibbylwhyte, when did you start giving them advance warnings? You spoilt my surprise element and you must compensate me with 6 more marks o. So you done start to do christmas for september the way you dey dash marks to this Aje-butter wey wear cheap cloth tie abi? Make I report you to the Commission or make I pound am and u look the other way. Choose sharp sharp

        1. Hahahaha! @hymar! @Topazo go soon give you one dose of injection wey go knock you out….

          *whispers* Abeg pound am, my dark sunshades don dey positioned. Lol.

  25. @hymar @sibbylwhyte.. …My olodo get grade dat why I no boda to write bubb-jamb.. Cos I don alrdy knw my scores..as benchwarmers nah we go jst show face so we fit empty pocket 4 prof bubblina so she go dash us sometin. *winks*

    1. @kingobozy. Chai! I don dey find you tey tey…dem no give you my message. You get my account numba, if you top am, call me, make I dash you your passover mark. *winks*

  26. I have been the “U” on different occasions. Just that in my case, the characters are not two but one.You don’t want me to tell you the rest. @sibbylwhyte, I like the concept.I just think that you should not have made it a “To Do” thing. It would have left us all hanging in the suspense of the drama.One would ask for example that who would have this woman allowed to watch her do her voyeurs for free? One will also think that it is not a baby because you made several allusions to one. I like stories that keeps one thinking.

    One more thing, I salute your aptitude-your description just draws all into the scene.”Swollen breasts”, some people might not know what you mean there, but if you have ever seen a nursing mother…*case close*. Well done dollar woman! -“$b”

    1. One more thing, beyond the candle thing is a story. That is a woman that does not like what she is doing, but have to do it to survive at least have a shelter for her baby. It is a sad story indeed.

    2. @sambrightomo. If you enjoyed the story and had fun reading the ensuing comments, then I am glad.
      About the To-Do: What Bubb-Jamb has set, it has been set. And you got that part about swollen breasts, you analyse am well sha.

      Shey you know say you be like pesin wey enta Jamb hall, tell invigilator say, “Bros, I like this your bear-bear, but wetin make you no shave am? Infact I no dey write this exam again, e be like say you wan bomb us.”

      For your suggestion on the improvement of Bubb-Jamb, take 5 marks. Hehe.
      Thanks for reading and commenting. I appreciate. $ß.

      1. Sambrightomo… i can’t tell how much I love the fact that you got to the crux of the story. It is a sad story, many go through: doing things they never would have dreamt possible, just so they could survive. Thanks SamB.

      2. Marks for mouth? Speech Act theory! Locution!

        1. Lol. We dey learn from our puniticians dem.

  27. Everyone has answered it all; found the ‘U’s and figured it was a candle. This also helped

    “I try to tell her but she looks at my white,
    slender frame of wax sadly”

    Good Job. Ma

    *KG*

    1. Thanks for reading Greins.. And yes, that was a hint too. Take 40 marks. Appreciate your dropping in, @kodeya. $ß.

  28. Plus. Man Utd completes Fellani deal…..Hurray…
    Sorry, thought I was on FB…..
    *KG*

  29. @hymar u dey find trouble! Don’t let the shirt and ‘cheap cloth tie’ deceive u o…i will beat u blue and black. I have numerous weapons of mass destruction…

    @sibbylwhyte if u love ur guy, warn am.
    # smiling to u…thanks for the marks…iv always dreamed of having an A in ur course. u made my dream come true.

    @mimiadebayo I told u that one day, this ur avatar will cost u marks. U see now? Dragging for marks with NS boxer…if only u show them what iv seen…

  30. *redfaced* @sibbylwhyte so you want me to be beaten huh? Well ur mistaken, cos I will beat him and then come for you….

    On second thought, could there be any reason you want me beaten?…hmmmm…so you cn derive perverse pleasure in tending my wounds abi…* catch ya!*

    1. @topazo. *winks* You are on point. I will have fun nursing your wounds, and so will you. Hehe.
      Wetin do Mimi avatar na? Shey na because the thing eye resemble pesin wey don overhigh ehn? See as the teeth resemble gate sef. Lol

  31. Lol, some people no well for our dear NS o. Hahahah.

    And hey, Congrats, @Topazo, you just entered into my To Do List. People like you keep Satan’s Ghetto casket makers in business.

    Shedding Crocodile Tears in Advance.

    1. @hymar lolz. You are in over your head this time. When I’m thru dealing with u ehn…well, till then

      1. @hymar and @topazo. Shey una never kill unaselves finish? I still need the critiquing team hale and hearty o…

        1. @sibbylwhyte the guy don beg me. We r good now

  32. *Removes eye-glasses and *sits right!
    @sibbylwhyte Indeed “ONE OF A KIND”, a write up!
    So good to read from you Bubb…
    Nothing makes me happier than creative write ups like this…
    Buh please I goh *U a question, huh?

    Shey u geh d address of d house whay dis stuff happen, ehn?
    Me wan go help d woman ni Oooo! Lolz!

    And to those Jamb questions, sorry; I forgot to register for JAMB! *winks!

    *keep penning!
    $$$Well done my lecturer!$$$

  33. ….this is super awesome!!!

    1. @omoniyi. And your reply is the awesomest*! Lol. Thanks for reading, dear. I appreciate. $ß.

  34. You know, Bubbles, you do me proud.

    Well done.

    1. @seun-odukoya.
      Sensei! Following your light na. I can’t quantify how delighted I am to read that, but you know na.
      Thanks for checking in. I appreciate. $ß.

  35. @sibbylwhyte

    You came at this from a new angle and its a powerful one. Much appreciated read.

    1. @alabaOK. I am really glad you liked this… Thanks for reading and commenting. Appreciated. $ß.

  36. @kleavajimcy… *peers over her glasses* My friend go and bring your registration fee…Government says everyone must go school.

    I am mighty glad that you enjoyed the read…
    Yes o. I sabi the address, but you know na, aje-butter like you no fit go dia, so just give me the money and extra thing you wan give dem, I go use my hand go. Hehehe.
    Thanks for reading, Klea. Appreciate. $ß.

    1. Hehehe…lol!
      I may get other helps to render to her in person that you may not be able to help out with…but the, the candle won’t be a witness! *smiles!
      Was actually drinking gaari when I replied you…na pako gidi I dey chop kee! Hian!
      If I was to answer those questions tho, I would have copied and pasted @topazo ‘s answer! Na 95A d guy pam!

      1. Ehn? Other help. You sure say no be your uncle be that landlord. Candle must dey dia, by hook or crook. Hian!
        Copy-copy. I for deduct mark for dat your glasses. Shey na magnifying glass be dat? Oya bring it here. Lol.

  37. @topazo wetin I do you na? I dey my own jeje oo!
    Infact I go team up with @Hymar mk we beat you black and blue.
    Oya fist fighter where you dey?
    As for Lecturess @sibbylwhyte you him dey deir dey cheat, shey na because I no settle you before exam ba?
    Why u go give topazo 75marks?After he don see expo finish. Na y he come siddon near me na. To copy.

    1. @Mimiadebayo, no mine dat ojoro mistress, na so she go dey do cos @Topazo na her sister boyfriend. We go waylay am soon. Leave that teacher pickin. We go show am na

  38. @mimiadebayo I no knw say u sef go team up against me. You, of all people !
    Why d biff? Ddnt u see the lecturess comments ni? Neat handwriting, well articulated answers…good looks…sorry good dressing.
    Na me talk sey make u no dress well for the exam? Or dt u shld hv bad handwriting? Abeg free me..

  39. These comments na comedy half hour I swear.

    Great post! Sad story!
    Had a good laugh going thru the comments.

  40. Today I saw a typo in your work… ‘….her eyes is…’ I think it’s supposed to be ‘… here eyes are…’ ???

    Interesting.

  41. Simply amazing! I enjoyed this a lot

  42. Interesting, you have a knack for writing.

  43. Saw the answers, but while scrolling down to write it, I observed others had presented them, however, I presume these wouldn’t be stale:

    1. There’s a U in VoyeUr.
    2. From the title “in the light”, aside from *wax* and the last line, we can deduce that it’s a Candle’s tale.

    I find this extremely superb that you told a tale from a candle’s POV, that’s out of the literary world… Infact, you’re the light of this literary world. €&

  44. this is more than intriguing…………

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