The Outcast

Outcast – Episode 8

Out of nowhere, I felt two strong hands on my tightened grip and an accompanying baritone voice whispering into my ears ‘Calm down, release your grip and let me handle it’.

I released my grip a little and this stranger lifted the bowl off my head.

He stooped and pulled me to my feet and held me close and whispered again

‘You are safe now’.

He smelt so good and sounded so reassuring. I then opened my eyes and gazed at his face, masking my fear that the panic attack may return if I dared take my eyes away from his. He was dressed in a dark suit and a tie.

Clara tilted my head to look at her with one hand on my jaw and the other holding onto the load on her head.

‘What’s wrong with you Esther?’ Her voice miffed with concern, her probing eyes darting about in their sockets.

‘She’s acrophobic’. The man replied.

‘Ehn ehnnnn’ Clara exclaimed turning to face him looking confused yet acting like she knew what he meant.

‘I mean she has a phobia for heights’ he explained, apparently seeing the confused state of Clara’s face.

‘Can you walk’ he asked returning his gaze to me.

‘I will hold your hand, don’t be scared’. He said.

‘Ok’. I said surprised I could find my voice.

I fell into steps beside him, holding tightly to his hand and refusing to look around.

Hand-in-hand, we gently walked the remaining stretch and began to descend the bridge.

Safely perched at the foot of the bridge, he asked me to sit while he returned to the top of the bridge to get my bowl of rice. Shortly after, he re-appeared with the bowl perched on his shoulder. I thanked him and carried my rice and continued with Clara. And before I could ask for his name, he had disappeared with the crowd the same way he had appeared. I felt a tinge of disappointment that I couldn’t at least get to meet and know the name of this kind stranger.

‘Sorry o but why are you afraid of bridge na?’ Clara asked piercing my thoughts.

I thought about her question for a while. No answer came to mind, so I kept quiet and continued walking. I never knew about this phobia before now.

It was a phobia I realized I had to overcome or what other choice do I have? Try to dash across the busy road? That would be suicidal, I mused.

I was still pondering over my options when my slipper stepped on something soft that threw me into a sliding motion. I lost my balance and landed on my butt. My mouth flew open letting out a scream induced more out of the shock of seeing my bowl of rice upside down than the painful impact of my butt on the ground. There and then, the putrid smell of faeces hit my nostrils. I had tripped on a heap of feaces. My slipper and skirt were all smeared with feaces.

‘Oya help me’ Clara said, overcoming the initial shock she felt seeing me sprawled on the floor and I stood to help her drop her load.

‘Which kain wahala be dis today nau?’ Clara whined in pidgin.

My eyes shot daggers at her. Anger quickly took the place of the shock and pain.
Hot rage welled up in me at the messy sight of the yellowish feaces and the rotten smell.

‘Abeg don’t let aunty know o’ Clara advised me with a hint of fear in her voice.
After gathering what was salvageable from the wreckage, we resumed our trip to the shed.

Ah! Aunty, Esther was scared of the bridge o. It was God that saved her on top of the bridge just now o’. Clara said excitedly to Aunty Patience when she got to the shed.

‘She is a villager na’ Aunty Patience said laughing sadistically.

Hot tears scalded my eyes as anger welled up inside me at Aunty Patience’s cold and insensitive comment. Was it not this same Clara that said Aunty shouldn’t hear about the incident? Why is she now running her mouth as if she’s suffering from verbal diarrhea? I quickly dabbed my cheek with both palms. I wasn’t going to let her see my tears. She wants to ridicule me. I wasn’t going to give her the pleasure of seeing me cry. Slowly letting out a deep breath I maintained a stoic appearance.

Looking at both of them now as they stood there selling to eager customers, I couldn’t help but notice the similarities between Aunty Patience and Clara with an organism I had been taught recently- Amoeba. Once I had sat with Queen my elder sister as she pore over her biology textbook. I was trying to work on my homework too. Minutes later, she turned to face me with that satisfied smile lighting up her ebony pear-shaped face.

‘Have you finished now’? I asked.
‘Largely’ she beamed.
‘Ok tell me about your homework and then I will tell you about mine’. I said
‘My assignment is on Amoeba’. Queen said.

‘Amoeba is a shapeless unicellular organism’. She had continued spurred on by my curious look.

Gazing at my aunt again, I could so see the semblance with what Queen was trying to describe to me back then.

With huge breasts drooping to her stomach and complimented by layers of folds, her top half, a mass of flabby excess flesh seemed disproportionately in contrast to her bottom half. Her flat buttocks tapered off into thin legs. I wondered how her thin bottom half could support her excessive upper half. Yes, shapeless amoeba, a very apt description of Aunty Patience’s physique. I silently chuckled.

‘What is all this inside the rice?’ Aunty Patience shrieked, penetrating my line of thoughts.

My heart did a somersault…

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28 thoughts on “Outcast – Episode 8” by Da'Queen (@Estee)

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    Zikora (@Zikora): Scribe - 10640 pts

    Choi! Esther God loves you but they will kill you!

    @Estee…..what happened to Esther’s faeces soiled cloths and slippers??

    You wrote ‘pore’ instead of ‘pored’…..past tense ish, I know its a mistake. Watch punctuation too.

    I’m still reading!

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      Da'Queen (@Estee): Senior Scribe - 29805 pts

      Corrections noted with thanks sweerie.

      Keep reading.

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    Mimiadebayo (@Mimiadebayo): Head Wordsmith - 211421 pts

    From one problem to another.Hmmm…

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      Da'Queen (@Estee): Senior Scribe - 29805 pts

      Like one week, one trouble. lol

      Thanks for reading and commenting pretty @Mimiadebayo

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    Da'Queen (@Estee): Senior Scribe - 29805 pts

    @Zikora, good question. Choi! lol.
    Didn’t remember to ask her ooh.
    Will do that subsequently….

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    schatzilein (@schatzilein): Scribe - 11985 pts

    Na wa….God save this girl

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      Da'Queen (@Estee): Senior Scribe - 29805 pts

      Amin Jesu!

      Thanks for always reading and commenting @schatzilein

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    topazo (@topazo): Head Wordsmith - 58959 pts

    this looks rushed to me….you skipped a lot of details. how did she deal with her feces soiled dress? im sure she wont have worn the clothes all day…

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      Da'Queen (@Estee): Senior Scribe - 29805 pts

      I will try to try subsequently boss.

      I always look forward to your comment @topazo.

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    Sunshine (@nicolebassey): Head Wordsmith - 51293 pts

    Sniff so much wahala…

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      Da'Queen (@Estee): Senior Scribe - 29805 pts

      Oh you did?!

      Thanks for reading and commenting @nicolebassey.

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    Olan (@Olan): Scribe - 15363 pts

    Hahaha, lol. They must be following her from her village, lol.

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      Da'Queen (@Estee): Senior Scribe - 29805 pts

      Lol this babe wicked

      Thanks for reading @Olan

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    Joy (@jade69): Junior Writer - 2430 pts

    Oh my word,how does dis girl keep getting in2 trouble dis much,my heart sincerely goes out 2 her.Now i wonder wats in d rice.God help her:(

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      Da'Queen (@Estee): Senior Scribe - 29805 pts

      God bless your darling heart @jade69

      We shall know wats in the rice soon enough.

      Thanks a lot for reading.

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    ablyguy (@francis): Senior Scribe - 21644 pts

    The description of that your aunty was wicked oh! One step one trouble is more apt for this one. You’re still doing your thing…

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      Da'Queen (@Estee): Senior Scribe - 29805 pts

      Well we have to say it the way it is, if it turns out wicked too bad.

      Thanks for reading @francis

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        ablyguy (@francis): Senior Scribe - 21644 pts

        @estee, by wicked I don’t literarily mean wicked. I was imitating Ron…

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          Da'Queen (@Estee): Senior Scribe - 29805 pts

          @francis I knew but wanted to act funny.
          Now you made feel like a learner. #crying#

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    ablyguy (@francis): Senior Scribe - 21644 pts

    Lol! Ndo oh!

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    Efadel (@febidel): Senior Scribe - 26498 pts

    @Estee, so the rice met its appointed fate after all. You left out a lot of details oh. Other readers have already mentioned the faeces soiled cloth and body. We also don’t know how much of the rice was salvaged (though I am already guessing that there was some shit in the rice). There must have been some drama in deciding whether to pack the rice like that or to leave it and face the music. I also think that the part about learning about amoebas is out of place. It reads “artificial”. Da Queen, abeg, allow this story flow. It’s a nice plot, but one morning has already been dragging for about four episodes now. Very soon, one may lose interest in this particular story and stop checking for the next episode. Since the episodes are not so regular, try ensuring that each episode is loaded with enough story to make it worth it for the readers.

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      Da'Queen (@Estee): Senior Scribe - 29805 pts

      You raised very valid points @febidel thank you.
      I will work hard on it.
      I hope I can make subsequent episodes worthy of your time.

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        Efadel (@febidel): Senior Scribe - 26498 pts

        Thank you, dear. I look forward to the next episode.

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    Ayoks (@sucess001): Head Wordsmith - 207536 pts

    superb…hooked on this like drugs…nice job!

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      Da'Queen (@Estee): Senior Scribe - 29805 pts

      Lol…you are too kind @sucess001

      Thanks for reading.

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    Efadel (@febidel): Senior Scribe - 26498 pts

    @Esteeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee! I am waiting!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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      Da'Queen (@Estee): Senior Scribe - 29805 pts

      Lol…
      You are so sweet @febidel.
      Episode 9 should be out in a day or two.

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    Chime221 (@Chime221): Scribe - 12030 pts

    Just like the other episodes, this one is quite griping and full of troubles; sequence of troubles.
    Well done @Estee

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