Rhythm Of My Heart

Rhythm of my heart

Beating pom pom

To a tune unknown.

Racing…

Frenzied…

Beating for survival.

And I dance to it,

For I hear no other music.

 

You come to me

And hold my heart captive

Then…

The rhythm changes

A new beat!

A new song!

Alas! I dance a new step.

And for you only,

I sway my hips

And juggle my feet

To this rhythm of my heart.

I am enraptured in this music,

And by you,

The one my heart beats for.



18 thoughts on “Rhythm Of My Heart” by Efadel (@febidel)

  1. Your writing will sure inspire love and transformation indeed!!! @febidel you are thinking my thoughts. There is something about the heart’s rhythm and love.I like it. Thanks for sharing your thing.

    1. P.S: Does the heart beat go POMPOM or GBIGBI, I think the onomatopoeia is GBIGBI.
      #just my thought#

      1. @sambrightomo. I’m happy you like this poem. About the onomatopoeia, I didn’t consider that. Thank you for that observation.

        1. Like I said it is my thought.Yours could go pompom for the guy.LOL

          1. Come to think of it, @sambrightomo, I think my heart was going pompom when I wrote the poem. Lol.

            1. POM POM, wow that guy must be very special!

  2. i am not an art student but i believe the poet can make this poem better. it is okay though, short and clear to decipher.

    1. @Laworemike. I am open to your suggestions on how the poem can be improved. What are your exact observations? Can you be specific about how I can make this poem better? Thank you.

  3. … a great write…

    1. @innoalifa, Thank you. What do you think about “We Let them Hijack Our Christmas”. It was published on 31st December. I’d like to know what you think about it.

      1. @febidel you are welcome… let me check out “We Let Them Hijack our Christmas.”

        1. ok. Looking forward to your comments.

  4. Bola (@basittjamiu)

    nice write! Straight to the point, easy to decode or decipher.@sambright, I agree with you. GBiGBI could have beautify it more.

    1. @basittjamiu. Your suggestion is duly noted with thanks.

  5. Simple but nice. But it can be better. I especially felt that a different word for ‘captive’ might have made it more elegant.

    1. @chemokopi. Thank you. What words do you suggest in place of ‘captive’? I’d like to know, please- it can only get better.

  6. nice one, so who is the lucky one your heart beats to?.

    1. @danjuma, thank you. But I should not kiss and tell, should I?

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