Because I died!

Because I died!

When I took that picture

The camera man in their nature

Said things to tease

Like say, “che-a-se”

 

Perhaps I did to please him

To add to his professional hymn

And just because I died yesterday

That was the obituary in display

 

I thank God that I died

Indeed, I thank God that I did

I stood behind them

As they chanted their anthem

 

Though spirits don’t feel, but I cried

Some were even so happy I died

Even that one I thought was a brother

He feigned sorrows, but within never

 

Absurdly, a girl on the picture was in love

Admiring the set out teeth in pitiable rave

As if she was cursing the death that stole me

So she went bland like a lad stung by a bee

 

“I am a dead man, please leave me,” I said

Or didn’t you remember that made you sad

Whilst I absorbedly struggled my struggles

Now you gloat like a goat over my corpse

 

You killed me, you murderous liar!

Lynched my being with your tongue of fire

But the whirlwind of fairness is come forth

Then would you know I am full of breath

 

I am filled with breath, yes, here I breathe!

A phoenix deified with immortality’s wreath

However, one only dies, if he chooses to die

For upon my being is life’s inundation like dye



30 thoughts on “Because I died!” by ostar (@ostar)

  1. Great work my man.
    Been looking for you on NS. Now I know why I couldn’t find you.
    Where are you now? In hell or in hades?

    1. @Kaycee: You are sick!! Great work, how? Oga Ostar obviously wrote this in a hurry…

      1. @Sueddie Agema if you were the one that died, I bet not even the Apocalystic trumpets would raise your ‘sick’ head up @Ghostwriter you understood the quale because there’s something of spirit in common. It’s the revenge rolling, starting from my Agemaic friend. This is poetry and It’s only a bat that knows what it is to be a bat!

        By the way @Sueddie Agema good to have you back!

        1. Hee hee hee! Agemaic, abi?
          @Ghostwriter: There’s some deepness to your mention-name. Could mean several things but wow, I do like the name especially from the traditional view.

          @ibagere: high sounding words… Hmm. Mazi is like that jare.

          MAZI o, hmm, I would get to you with your own title too. :) Ututu oma.

          1. @Sueddie Agema I’ve always come alive on the account of the intellectual provocations from stuffs like you. Dalu Ikorobia!

            1. Intellectual provocation? Hee hee hee! ‘Stuffs like us’
              *Laughing in an Ogbuefied voice [would get there someday]:
              Really? Hmm, at least if we do that we would help ourselves away from this poem or its kind in the future :)

  2. Yea, i missed you too. I remember all those high sounding words of yours, whenever you replied weth and kaycee…profound… Nice piece.

    1. @sassystel I tell you solemnly, I miss yo’ll.
      I gotcha.

  3. @Kaycee at hades’ heart, the devil saw Ostar and lost heart. He forgot he wouldn’t pray; but heavens would want me to
    Write more…. Chi e kewo m o!

  4. nice piece from you, the ryme was good, keep the ball rolling.

  5. “Now that you’re of full breathe, would you revenge?
    Or would you make amends?”
    Nice…for someone who’ƨ dead, you sound very much alive!

  6. “Now that you’re of full breath, would you revenge?
    Or would you make amends?”
    Nice…for someone who’ƨ dead, you sound very much alive!

  7. @pleasure sure there’s always a pressure, such that often pushes something out of life like, “rhyme” without “h”….

    Welcome to NS!

  8. I like the spirit of the poem Oga Ostar but I think it is somewhat rushed and could have been done far better. As it is, you look as if you are more concerned with rhymes… I have read your poems and been to your blog. Of course I know you write better!

    For instance, check this:
    “I am a dead man, please leave me,” I said
    Or didn’t you remember that made you sad…

    Oh! These ones don’t even rhyme masef! But check the second line. Is it really coherent?
    How does a goat gloat…over a corpse? Okay, how does a goat gloat?
    See this one again:

    As if she was cursing the death that stole me
    So she went bland like a lad stung by a bee

    Haba! What you really write like this on a normal day? Jare, there’s work to be done. IT starts from the very first line and flows to the last. I think there’s much merit to the spirit of the poem. It looks like something that would be really nice in the end.

    For the moment, Mazi, it isn’t there yet. Dalu.

    1. @Sueddie Agema the work is a story of a man, me. An ontological assessments of a subjective experiences. I appreciate your quarrels with the effects, though with some subtle show of complexes.

      “Haba! What you really write like this on a normal day?” This is incoherent.
      ” It looks like something that would be really nice in the end.”
      Well, at the end”, …die” ended your name.
      Thanks for reading.

      1. The Mazi has spoken :)
        Noted, duely noted!

        1. Coming to this again… What I meant is that I think this could have been better. You write better than this on a normal day…
          Don’t mind my sleepy fingers at that moment… :)
          But like I said, noted.

  9. Ostar, slap the devil for @kaycee jor!

  10. @ablyguy consider it done!
    As for @kaycee, God will not agree to send him to hell. He’s definitely gonna spoil things for the devil!

  11. oga @ostar welldone jare. Welcome back to NS. Its been a while.

    1. @louis: I sent you a message. Did you see it?
      @francis: Guy, it’s been a while. How are you doing? Hope you good…

      1. @Sueddie, I’m fine oh! I’m always around. I can see you’re full of life unlike my man here…

        1. @francis: I no dey o!! Before someone begins to say that intellectual yabs raise his…kini kon kini kon!! :)

  12. @lactoo sent you words before I left. The transition was without friction, so ‘am through the motion to action now! Thank you for your words.

  13. @ablyguy @Sueddie Agema being around is not just mere bodily presence, even corpses have such characteristic.
    Being there, as in Art, is an affective presence, such that even when a piece of work is removed, the minds (good ones) still perceive the presence (of its absence). This is the ontological deference and difference between Dasein & Temporarity!

  14. Poets make me wonder at times, see arguments sha. Got me a little puzzled though, nice one!

  15. @elly yeah I do really wonder and ponder too as I wander!

  16. @ostar

    i had often wondered when I go for funerals and see the pictures that had this person known at the time the picture was being taken, that it would be used at their funeral.

    This poem captured that for me. But I think I agree that it could still be worked on. The concept is great however.

  17. @funpen

    Fun + Pen is inflammably poetic!
    Work is in progress on, “Because I Died.”

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