I was but a child
when I was told I was a bride in waiting
A book with words written in Gold
was all I had to learn of my groom,THEY called it the HOLY BIBLE
of all his prophets and servants,
no one knew when he would return
but they said he would come like a thief in the night
so they asked that I be ready.
As I read of this book,
I realized that he had walked the surface of the earth once
Those who saw him said
he came to make life easier
that I may wait for his return
so they taught me
To walk,talk,dress
and even think like him.
While I waited, many other suitors came
to ask for my hand in marriage
many I remember,the rest I wish to forget
first of them was PRIDE
He was tall and handsome
shoulders higher than the twin towers of new york
yeah, sure you guessed
he listened to no one but
himself.
then came FASHION
HA! he was different
he was just BEAUTIFUL
he painted me in all colors of the rainbow,
he made me feel Strong,pretty and
OH! bless me!
he made the world worship at my feet!
and made me feel like a goddess in
the midst of those whom I called friends
he used me for his delight,
turning me into a puppet
allowing me to cover and show my nakedness
only, as he pleased.
AH HA! how can I forget?
CULTISM, he was like the rest
but he, he offered me more,
he said he would protect me
and that nothing! living under the earth
not even death would hurt me
He fascinated me!
Against all odds I accepted his request
just like the others
turning deaf ears to the prophets and servants
my groom had kept to nurture me
In the length of time, he had turned me into a slave
even I feared myself for he had poured all manner of
libations on my skin, turning my body into a mere object
putting tattoos and devilish images on it as he pleased.
each time I wept, not for the pain but because I knew
my body was meant to be sacred, a temple of worship
for my groom to be.
what scared me most was how he had turned me into a
human slayer!
when I was with him I had little or no value for
human life,
I slaughtered them, both family and friends
without care of how they felt.
I had become a beast.
all through this time, others came
LUST, HATRED, JEALOUSY,MALICE,ANGER,REBELLION,LIES
OH!bless me the list never ends..
each of them had a seep of me
using me for their selfish purposes
reducing me to nothing but a cheap, hopeless child.
I was weak could not fight back.
Then he came, FORNICATION
I remember him too well to forget
I adored him,HE loved my flesh
We spent time saying sweet nothings to each other
promising lies that made hell smile
Then he asked that I surrender ME to prove love
I was broken, I was all I had left for my groom- to- be
so I begged,but he wont listen
bit by bit he began to take the little I had left
Then I considered myself nothing but a waste.
waste of space, time and resources.
so I gave in.
As I sat waiting for him to come and claim
me, a voice spoke to me.
Beloved.” fear not’ he said ” for I have given you power
to trade upon snakes and scorpions”
I feared for I knew not who had spoken
“I am the lord mighty in battle”
he said reading my thoughts
as he spoke, light so bright I feared to look shone in my soul
we spoke a while and he told me tales.
tales of truth and love.
As I basked in his comforting presence,
FORNICATION came,he seemed to notice my guest
his face wrinkled in anger.
“I come for thy soul” he said
“too late, for I own it no more” I replied
my words had lit fire in his eyes,
his anger had set sail
from his lips he spoke words of accusation
and called me names that reminded me of my past
I could take them no more,I rose and stood tall
I knew the former was a man of valour
I roared with the loudest of my voice
“sins set me free,for my body be not a temple for thee
but for the one who created me”
as I spoke,I saw the father smile
then I said words most of which i don’t know
what happened next i don’t remember
but what i knew I was prepared to do as my groom wished
for I was a bride in waiting…
I still have no Idea if this should be posted here,and if anyone can understand it at all..without all the acting..spoken word .wrote it for church weeks ago.all opinions very well welcomed thanks.


Interesting. There are quite a number of captivating lines. I would say though that you should not neglect punctuation in poetry. Capitalize letters coming after full stops and exclamation marks. Use words in capital letters sparingly. In fact, I think that you should let the crafting of the poem highlight such important words for us.
I was tempted to say that this is prose arranged in lines of verse. But I enjoyed the rhythm in many places so I would rather say that you should tighten this; make it more imaginative and you would have something really wonderful. Maybe you can look at Susan Lenzkes poems on the back front cover of Everyday With Jesus for some comparison.
Well done. Keep improving your art. There is no end to learning.
I think that the difference is this ‘SPOKEN WORD’ – in other words it was written to be performed and not to be read, so you really cannot ‘feel’ it by reading it. You dig?
I think it’s nice. I think it works for me – just as it is.
No arguing with you o, @chemokopi. Introducing another perspective, I am.
Thanks alot for stopping by…will sure use all corrections.
Nice.
@shadiat thanks alot
Beautiful poetry. I saw poetry all the way. Please you musnt touch this.
thank you very much….@ Ohmston Weth….
Great!
thyankz@manueladesola
Nice try @katiee
I really like this line:
“….promising lies that made hell smile…”
Keep it up!
@ayistar thankz
I understood it. So please do not touch the poem. What you need to do however is to correct the typos. like you wrote TRADE instead of TREAD… amongst others. It is well…
May we all know HIM and the power of HIS resurrection. May we be ready brides when HE appears. Kudos
@daireen..yez sire!..me handz are totali off then..hehe…thankz for reading thou
I didn’t finish it all sha, but from the part i read, you did a good job.
“was all I had to learn of my groom, (THEY called it the HOLY BIBLE.)”
The part in brackets could have been done without. It made the line too…
@katiee AWESOME! perhaps a little lengthy? I looovvee the beginning though
Thankz @Tiwa
@katiee … It’s worth posting here over and over again… I love it – the words were carefully chosen… the style, quite captivating… keep on…
Thankz!!..
nice
Fankz@elvepoetry