Gossiping is our best activity
rumours literally spread like wildfire
her husband is cheating on her, what is she going to do?
shalewa is pregnant, will she keep it?
dont mind that girl, she’s not even rich
her boyfriend does not love her, he is justing pretending
Stealing is the order of the day
our so called authorities are not left out
my bag is missing, sorry get another one
she stole my bra and she lied about it
armed robbers attacked me and took my car
‘na yahoo yahoo we they do, you go join’
We toil 25 hours a day, no rest
thats how we survive everyday
its 5am in the morning, ‘come buy bread’
‘aunty this skirt fine, e go fit you’
i leave for work at 6am and return at 9pm
i have to feed my family, see you later
No one serves you better than ‘mama putt’
their cooking keeps you coming back for more
‘abeg madam put fisi’
50 naira rice, 2o naira meat
The police force is excellent
911, there are robbers in my area
sorry ma there is no feul in our vehicle
your liscence has expired, bring 200 naira ‘oya go’
We break the rules, no one cares
we get away with it, we do it again
‘na gutter be that may i go piss’
just throw the wrapper out of the window
Herbalism is totally different
i can stop the rain you cannot
love potions, death ‘juju’
we are so ignorant about everything
our mindset is totally wrong
there are good things and there are bad things
but still all these make up Nigeria
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fiyin @tamor
started writing in secondary school. am not perfect but am getting there. I'll make mistakes and I'll take corrections.Go to fiyin's profile, and read more of his/her posts.
Captures all about our life in Nigeria so simply. Imagine, “your liscence has expired, bring 200 naira ‘oya go’”! That sounds like the police. Remember they are our friends.
Nice….Check some of the spellings like ‘liscence and feul…should be licence/license and fuel…
Well done…$ß
@sibbylwhyte my bad. i was really going to correct that, was so sleepy when i posted it that i forgot to check it… thanks tho
Not a good excuse. Writers should not be sloppy
@ magic, if writers should not be sloppy- why are people making tons of cash from just writing articles on how to be better writers, remember writers are first humans…
This is good, I think you did a good job trying to capture way of life of Nigerians. And to some extent, you tried. Good.
Great ideas . Is this an event ?
Too chaotic.
You didnt even take the poem serious enough, and thats a disrespect.
@kaycee somehow, you’ve become my favorite critic on here. Damn too straight and unflinching :d
@magic wow!!!! are you for real, writers shouldn’t be sloppy because they are gods right??? good to know
@kaycee too chaotic, seriously??? Nigeria is chaotic, and i did take it seriously. you are the disrespectful one.
What the hell in Shakespeare’s name is wrong with you, @tamor? People who cant take criticism shouldn’t write. Or they should keep their sheet to themselves. Simple. You want everybody to kiss your ass? Not here on NS.
Nice.
You’ve been corrected so here’s all I’ll say: this feels like an essay not a poem. the ending was cool though. Raise your head, persist and persevere, you’re becoming a better writer by the day. (y)
http://www.ehow.com/info_10056677_5-key-characteristics-poetry.html
LOL
@ostar
No much talk abi?
Fiyin, you really should take note of the above criticisms instead of being offended; criticisms are part of what makes a writer better.
And you said Nigeria is chaotic. Tell me, is the bad side all you see?
@Kaycee yeah, no much talks.
@shadiat great shot
@fiyin I appreciate people when the spare
time to read me, mostly when they help me
by saying I didn’t do fine here, there and there.
It is often annoying, I understand but very very
fulfilling tomorrow.
Well done
Good effort @ trying to capture everyday life, well-done…
@ Uche you did well with change, very vivid imagery, our liberty is not a mind taboo, change has come with our generation- hopefully…
Well done.
Sorry wrong post…