BB,
We clutch them like babies,
Yet they prod us like zombies,
Turning us into dummies.
Homo sapiens walk while pinging,
Some others chat while driving.
The ‘likes’ and ‘dislikes’ on your DP,
Now a parameter for evaluating your personality.
We’ve all gone diabolic,
Breeding dual personalities
Our addiction to self-gratification is worse than cannabis,
We’ve become self-seeking and egoistic
BB,
You bring out the children in adults,
And our children you have made adults.
Checking updates like its our pulse
Distraction optimized, making us lose focus.
Rapper ‘Ill Bliss,
With lyrical finesse
Was not far amiss
When he hissed
About how much our IQs are lower than our contact lists.
Mass programming at your fingertips.
Feeding relationships with people we don’t know even exist.
Simple face to face conversations now extinct.
There is no more dinner talk,
Or long garden walks.
‘Cos to our phones we have transferred the bulk,
Of making relationships work.
*Sigh* And we wonder why everything is so superficial …. nice poem
Everything you wrote here is all I’ve been trying not to be ever since… Nice lines. I kept praying it got longer as I read.
#VeryTrue
This is what the digital age brings along.Well change is the only constant variable in life.What a paradox!Thanks for sharing.
Nice one.
Well, I like the theme and thrust of the poem. Yet, I feel like there’s something missing somewhere.
Now, the message is there and there are elements of the devices but then, something skips… What is it? Could this poem be better if it is tightened? Could the poem flow more if it was loosened from essaic grips?
I don’t know. Maybe, Chika, you should look at it again and see how it can be tightened, infused with a few more devices and given more refinement.
To me, there’s more to this poem than this. Hopefully, it would get there.
Well done man. May BB not BB us out of this life. Cheers!
@sueddie, there is nothing wrong with the poem jare. It doesn’t need any tightening o
I decided not to renew my bbm subscription this month , and I’m surprised that life is still normal…lol
Great poem, but I wonder why you stopped rhyming after the first three lines ?
Ewo! how debased we could be….
This cautions us to draw some lines I guess…
Nice one Chika
very funny poem i laughed as i read the lines, one should also realize and embrace that we are in the age of information and technology, all these a passing fad, lets see what come next, maybe dem fit turn our hands to bb.
Wow! Lovely poem. Drawing d line btw my life n my bb as from now on (winks)
ah…i wonder how lyf will b without a mobile-computer (phone).
Yea, we’v replaced d tangible with the untangible. Nice nice
Thats experimental literature.I did not give you a chance.yet the poem somehow sticks.
A poem that keeps fueling my dislike for the phone. Hehehe… I do not doubt the people that say BB has an evil spirit innit…hahaha…Ills of the BondBreaker of relationships… well done o…$ß.
@sibbylwhyte: Same thing for Nokia!!
True, true, true
Nice
All I know is that my writing and connections has tripled since the year I started using my BB. That I hav had accidents while pinging is of no consequence.
@Kaycee, no wahala, the proper accident hasn’t come your way…
Careful man!!
PS: Yes, I think it does need tightening!
This is insightful but I disagree with @aghoghosam @kaycee @nicolebassey and all who think that this is a ‘GREAT’ poem. Without being too harsh, I’d say this is a piece of writting that touches on a very sensitive part of society but, barring a few verses, I’m afraid that @sueddie is totally right, perhaps even more than he thinks, that this need serious tweaking and reworking if it must qualify to be called a poem, much less a great poem.
I think we need an active forum to help young poets like us develop poetry writing skills because the quality of poems i read these days, are far much worse than the poor poems of the early NS days when I was just a newbie.
and just to mention it, BB’s have killed only the foolish, jobless ones. As for me, like @kaycee said, it has increased me as a poet and writer.
@xikay , i see you. I hope that is satisfactory. lol. GREAT?i never said it was great, i said it was nice, you see the thorns, i see the rose, that doesn’t make the poem prose.’. Even the English struggle to define what is or isnt a poem. You can tear this candid unique interesting work up if you want to. I like it and i say again NICE.
Its your choice. NS is to help people develop and so if we dont help each other achieve that… well. Ask around and they’ll tell you that @xikay does not just pass comments except they will help.
When i start using a BB, i would understand you…but generally…i like how you did this one
This is nice. When I tell people that Nokia Business phones like E63, E6 and the rest are better tools of communication, people chaff. BB is becoming the ruin of relationships and simple friendships. @aghoghosam…I did the same, I stopped subscription on mine too…I mean why would I want to know what you listening to, your dp uploads and dms? Infact since I hold two BBs due to the loss of my Nokia, and I stopped subscription on my MTN, and reduce that of Zain….life has been better and I longed for the good old days.
But on an aside, has MTN called anyone to ask why they have not subscribed? They called me oh and I had to stutter and lie…that my bb was having some problems…how could I tell them that I hated the MTN network’s fluctuations and that I was trying to detach myself from the BB madness?
Nice piece. Nice delivery. Welldone.
Well written. I love the clever use of words..
Hmmm… so true. U are on point.
Bb tiniz. No b smal tin.
Lol.Tell the BB users.Kudos.
Nawaa oooo, na so e be