Killing life for the resolve,
And missing renewed try
Makes ungracious the resolve.
The wrecked heart is lured free
To die, and kill the burning soul.
But war life is, where heroes return
Full medallions, but life rest no man
Battle few for lifetime.
Guns and cannons life defeats the
Battle. We have in the dark place
Wept death, and the world takes
The bright side; they mock life, we mourn.
Helpless we watch life burn fine crops to
Dust! Sometimes the sun ripe itself
Golden, and survival push life again
From horizon’s hill.
We must exist from the dark;
The crowd that wrote yesterday’s
Fall waits the story’s pause.
Be the painter coloring tomorrow
Fine colors; tomorrow’s picture
Is too big for everyone!
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WHAT HAS GOD NOT GIVEN?
The bird in
calm and unharmed
quiet smelled the
knife and
blood,
life saw last
stale sun,
her heart run,
and us;
what has God
not given to
man?
Even blood!
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LEVIATHAN FLOOD.
The seas,
ever flowing from where?
Eternal returning underneath
the hide and eye,
ringing the fear-beat gong:
hearts unrest,
leviathan flood wide mouth
to devour tiny humanity!
Alas,
it robs us all,
we awake to clap
for the ever flowing seas,
but has baited us with
the leviathan flood!


nice work, a lil too skinny in some places.
Thanks.
I love this:
Helpless we watch life burn fine crops to
Dust!
The enjambment here is really nice.
Generally, I think you need to work more on how you construct your sentences. Poetry still follows the rules of grammar in many ways. Write your lines as full sentences in prose and see if they are all correct.
Well done. Keep improving your art. There is no end to learning.
Thanks for that.
Well done
Thanks Kaycee.
@Sunshine, u said it all: very nice work, though in need of fleshing up in some place.
I saw creativity exploding into a blooming poetic garden here.
Well done, @Dike
Thanks Leekwid for coming in.
Nice. Keep at it.
Thanks Ably.
Nice piece of work. I like the second one more.
Thanks Layrite.
@dwilliams ur intent at making us work out the rhythm is kool….I sure did pause to re-read (several lines) to fully understand…
Thanks Shai, you the bomb!