War Cry!

War Cry!

We never cease to ponder

Why they pile and plunder

Still they smile and wander

Free like birds we wonder

 

Promises lasting forever

Actions we see like never

Their words entice like butter

Yet they oppress like thunder

 

No! We just can’t sit and watch

Evil permeate our blood so hot

For soon the poison would sink too deep

Then like robots we sleep and slip

 

Down the drains so dark and slippery

Crammed with evils thick and slimy

Where reasons fade fast in prisons

Built with greed from seasons to seasons

 

No! We must fight! Declare a war!

Let them hear from far and near

No more shall we just sit and rest

While they plan to steal the rest

 

Awake to the battle

Aye make them startle

Resist every evil

Bind up every devil

 

Arise to fight, come with arms

Come, though not with metal arms

Join us link our arms in arms

So we form resistant frames

 

Fight the evils and live for good

Thus our strength remains by God

Kill the thoughts to tow their line

Watch and guard thy pure true vine

 

Arise warriors, heed the war cry!

The battle we know is bitter to fight

Yet victory like wine is sweet to share

Bravo! Bravo! Come one come all!



25 thoughts on “War Cry!” by EXCELLENCY (@excellency)

  1. Oya na!…It would be fascinating to see the result of a war such as this…

    Nice one…the rhymes are off in some lines sha…But Well done still….$ß.

    1. @sibbylwhyte we can’t know the result, till we fight the war, but it’s promising one you can bet.
      …about the rhyming, I agree, sometimes it’s just difficult for rushing thoughts to flow rhythmically.
      I guess poetry is not only about rhyming words, but also meaningful thoughts, I think. I appreciate your stopping by bubllinna, I really do. Thanks ma’am

      1. If my comment made it seem like your rhyming scheme detracted from the piece…then it’s wrong..
        I’ve always believed that poetry should flow and not just have rhymes that are forced…So yours in my opinion is a good work… It passes the message across to us, nicely..

        1. I read you loud and clear @sibbylwhyte, roger that. Thanks again…

  2. Your Excellency, this is par excellence!

    I’m impressed with the tone and structure of this piece. Its a delightful call to ‘arms’

    The message is clear, succinct and it reads with fluidly.

    My favourite stanza is this:

    “Promises lasting forever

    Actions we see like never

    Their words entice like butter

    Yet they oppress like thunder”

    Your rhyming is excellent, but some words I think could be better phased, eg…

    Crammed with evil thick and slimy

    Built with greed from season to season

    Join us link our arm in arms

    Fight the evil and live for good or Fight this evil and live for good

    1. Oh thanks for the compliment and I hear the complement

  3. “No! We just can’t sit and watch

    Evil permeate our blood so witch

    No more shall we just sit and rest

    While they plan to steal the nest

    Arise warriors, heed the war cry!

    The battle we know is bitter to ply

    Yet victory like wine is sweet to share
    come then with arms not arms to dare

    Bravo! Bravo! Come one come all!”

    Just attempting suggestion; let this art stew and flow.
    Must not rhyme when it doesn’t. Notch up man, you will
    hatch great!

  4. I’ve always been one for rhymes and a bit of rhythm. I loved the flow Your Excellency. Smoothly written

  5. Jo (@josephoguche)

    Beautifully written … Hail..!

    1. I appreciate that @josephoguche. I hail pass…

  6. Nice, Nice, Nice….

    1. thanks, thanks, thanks… lol

  7. Long thing, hehehe. 9ja…

    Nice lines.

    1. Much thanks @Raymond, but where e long reach.

  8. Lovely rhymes.
    Go fight. I will sit here and write your story.

    1. hahaha @Kaycee
      I’m sure you remember the poem:
      …the valiant ones never taste death but once…
      but I trust if you write it, then our story would be masterly translated, eliciting every support possible…
      Thanks for the compliment.

  9. Nice one as always.

    1. Hmm, thanks @Seun-Odukoya, thanks…

  10. Nice one…flows well

  11. Nice one Your @excellency, really nice…

    1. Thanks Sire…

  12. @excellency
    I’m loving this………………..

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