Jun 262012
I STAND on the beach
Praying for a vision
Searching for a purpose
Waiting for a sign.
I FEEL the wind around me
Whispering to me softly
Speaking wisdom
Reminding me of dreams past.
I WALK at times, pondering
What the wind told me
At other times I run
Afraid of the sea.
I SCREAM now as I run
Terrified by the rushing waves
Soon I chuckle as the waters
Bathe my feet as humble lather.
I LOOK at the sea
The mighty waters far away
They commune with the clouds
They show me the prophecy.
I RUN
Faster now
The future calls
I must not be late.
Nice. I like the last verse most. Indeed, the future calls.
You used “d” for “the”
Nice grasp of word u’ve got here. Enjoyed it.
Thanks @louis. Glad you enjoyed it.
We gotta take our fate into our own hands (or legs as the case may be)…
Nice.
Thanks for commenting @seun-odukoya
Nice one Chemo….The future calls, so we run to it instead of retracing and thinking of the past…
How did that ‘d’ in line 2 of stanza 3, slip past?..
Simply nice!…Well done…$ß.
I don’t know O @sibbylwhyte. Can’t still believe my usually keen eyes failed me this time. I guess my faculties need some sharpening….lol. And thanks for your kind words of commendation. Much appreciated.chemokopi
I don’t know O @sibbylwhyte. Can’t still believe my usually keen eyes failed me this time. I guess my faculties need some sharpening….lol. And thanks for your kind words of commendation. Much appreciated.
Run run run…I like the tone of rush in the poem.Great angle,nice construction.
Thanks @sambrightomo. You are too kind!
Nice… Like John said the future started yesterday…
Hmmm…thanks @francis. Like the Chinese say, the best time to plant a tree is 10 years ago.
Well written
Thanks for your two kind words @kaycee.
May our purposes be clear. May we not fear to reach for the future. May our dreams come true. Good job Chemo. This poem is calm and neat.
Amen. Thanks for your kind words @obiaguomba. Much appreciated.
Beautiful lines with a didactic message.
I take it that this was inspired by verses from the scriptures?
It reads like a creative expansion of Habakuk 2:1
Hmmm…the wonders that poems do. Don’t think I have come across that verse till now…and it is an inspiring verse. My inspiration for the poem is funny though. My sister came back from an excursion with some sea shells and she wanted to use them to make an artwork that would feature two feet made from cardboard with the sea shells for toes. She asked me to write a poem for her that would go with the art…and that’s how this came about.
@afronuts: Hmmm…the wonders that poems do. Don’t think I have come across that verse till now…and it is an inspiring verse. My inspiration for the poem is funny though. My sister came back from an excursion with some sea shells and she wanted to use them to make an artwork that would feature two feet made from cardboard with the sea shells for toes. She asked me to write a poem for her that would go with the art…and that’s how this came about.
Thanks @chimzorom. How that ‘d’ escaped notice is beyond me. Thanks for pointing it out. Will be more careful next time.
Cool
Thanks @uchechukwu1
very nice
Thanks @mikeeffa
I love the rhythm and the message. As for the d and the, it might a result of sms abbreviationism creeping up in serious writing. Solution: Dont ever abbreviate anywhere. lol.
Thanks @layrite for your kind words. That’s the pitfall of using a phone to write these things. The mistake shouldn’t repeat itself hopefully.
Thanks again.
Nice poem, well written too…
Thanks @elly. You are too kind.
In My lastma Regalia, this is sweet, the background gist made it profound, well done Head Wordsmith.
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