She Stood Me Up One Too Many Times

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Jun 192012
 

…So I Wrote Her A Poem

 

Here I am again, laying mind swept

Just… thinking of you

Skulking through my mind’s crevasses

Any memory of you would do

.

Your smile… like a Caribbean summer

So warm and full of spice

Your voice piercing like a bullet

into my heart, how hard it tries

.

Tries to get away from the allure of your mystique

Tries to get away from your bittersweet beauty

Tries to find a way like it was hide and seek

But it remains laden, smitten by your mystery

.

Your eyes tell tales of a thousand fallen men

Your hips speak proverbs to the woe of the fallen

Your touch so tender, just your aura did woo men

You are clearly an astounding wo-man

.

Here I am again, laying mind swept

Just… thinking of you

Lost in a twisted fantasy

Trying to find you…

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  31 Responses to “She Stood Me Up One Too Many Times”

  1. Avatar of sambright
    sambright @ says:
    June 19, 2012 at 8:00 am

    @jamesndu bravo! Succint use of language is the hallmark of poetry.You have carefully chosen words that conveys imageries…welldone.

  2. Avatar of Afronuts
    Afronuts @ says:
    June 19, 2012 at 8:31 am

    And so the poet becomes one of the many fallen men…

    Beautifully written!

  3. Avatar of Sunshine
    Sunshine @ says:
    June 19, 2012 at 12:33 pm

    Lovely!!! Am a bit wary of the ending though, sounds inconclusive to me. what do you all think?

  4. Avatar of lactoo
    lactoo @ says:
    June 19, 2012 at 2:29 pm

    Niece poetry. Enjoyed it.

  5. Avatar of ablyguy
    ablyguy @ says:
    June 19, 2012 at 11:29 pm

    Great poem…

  6. Avatar of Ayodeji Lancaster
    Ayodeji Lancaster @ says:
    June 20, 2012 at 1:07 am

    Oh… Nice one. You worked hard on this one. Keep writing.

  7. Avatar of osakwe
    osakwe @ says:
    June 20, 2012 at 1:46 am

    Lovely poem. I enjoyed it. Wish you found some other words to describe her smile though.

  8. Avatar of Eletrika
    Eletrika @ says:
    June 20, 2012 at 2:03 am

    Seek her more. You’ll find her.

    Nice

  9. Avatar of Chimzorom
    Chimzorom @ says:
    June 20, 2012 at 5:58 am

    Been trying to imagine that smile like Caribbean summer!
    Nice poem.

  10. Avatar of Raymond
    Raymond @ says:
    June 20, 2012 at 7:58 pm

    Find her fast, before ya mind miss!

  11. Avatar of Obisike
    Obisike @ says:
    June 21, 2012 at 4:30 am

    I like your flow, bro. Well done!

  12. Avatar of gooseberry
    gooseberry @ says:
    June 21, 2012 at 5:48 am

    I love the tittle specially cause of the style… Nice poem too.

  13. Avatar of midas
    midas @ says:
    June 21, 2012 at 6:50 am

    Nostalgia.
    Idle minds and evocative thoughts.
    Nice one!

  14. Avatar of lawore olufemi
    lawore olufemi @ says:
    June 23, 2012 at 5:12 am

    a poem that captures my heart…Nice and Nice and Nice

  15. Avatar of funpen
    funpen @ says:
    June 24, 2012 at 9:54 am

    very nicely done.

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