May 232012
I try to reach you
yet again you spurn
i watch as you turn
your back and through
the corner of my eye
i see the spark die
so because i am human
yes, only a woman
i slowly detach
Alas, you ask now to patch
what you spurned
but my back is turned
i refuse to be
You, just let me be
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emilyonikaba @shewhoisloved
I love words.Go to emilyonikaba's profile, and read more of his/her posts.
I get the message but the structure of the poem is so all over the place.
True… i agree with Myne… nice poem though
Ya, Myne’s right….
Guess this is just your style…To put down whatever you think, without caring much about any ‘rule’….
This is the reason why people say anyone can write a poem…
D message of the poem came through…Keep writing.
captivating and direct! i love it.
every body definitely has a style- i say well done and keep writing
Nothing makes more sense than staying true to your beliefs and principles…why go back and eat your vomit?
Once the heart has taken flight
Its journeys through darkness
Misery becomes its plight
Visiting the pits of sadness
Direct and unique. I do agree with Myne but I guess it’s your style. Nice message. Well done @shewhoisloved (na wah dis name o)
I enjoyed the flow but it ended too quickly for me. 10/10 for hitting the nail on the head. Looking forward to reading more
What more can I say? Keep writing
yea just keep writing – practice brings out perfection