A daughter of great wealth
She was destined from birth
But the stride of the chicken
Is a grave sight to the hawk
So her kindred killed her
They bound her like rags
Hands and legs like rags
Like rags they buried her
She had no one, so she died
They killed her as they can
Thus no one mourned her
But her bitter heart and tears
The earth alone saw her wail
And refused to wet her tears
For her spirit seeks vengeance
From the heart of the fiery sun
Let them all die by the sun
Like flies, before its burnings
All those who killed Adaku
Heiress of strength and wealth
Let them all die without burial
No, let them be buried by ill fate
Let vultures undertake their carcass
Whilst winds flurry with their bones
They heard the voice not to kill her
Not none did not hear the warning
But like deaf, they shut their ears
And like dumb, they numbed truth
Since the skies saw them through
By sun by noon and moon by night
Let them then die slowly and utterly
That earth may learn from their fate
I breathe, I die and I live!
Okay…
@Anyi dalu inugo
@aturmercy you speak the word
@ostar I love this…
Envy, jealousy and greed may kill another’s dream,but surely as night turns to day whatever is sown…
Get admin to help fix the typos:
Not none (one) did not hear the warning
But like deaf, they shut their ears
And like dump,(dumb) they numbed truth
@aturmercy ok I will.
“Not none….” is deliberate. cf. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Double_negative
“double negatives cancel one another and produce an affirmative sense.”
Should I just take it that Adaku was killed or is there another “deeper” meaning?
I just don’t know.
Gad fly, I love your lines.
@Kaycee for words can be anthropomorphic!
Adaku’s function proves the recompense by nemesis.
@sally kenneth dadzie Kenneth?
I am Kenneth too.
Thanks for the points.
@Osundu G.O song of anger. Song of revenge.
Song that the Adakus should live!
I appreciate.
apart from the typos, the story is clear as day though, like Kaycee said, could there be a deeper meaning? splendid. well done
@Sally Kenneth dadzie thanks namesake (Kenneth)
‘am working hard on it.
Song of anger,revenge?
Nice poem
@Osondu G O
yes song of revenge in the day of ire!
Probably this was inspired by a movie or its likes, ‘cos this sort of thing doesn’t happen anymore.
Well done.
@Eletrika it’s imaginary, though I see humans
do worse than that in certain words and deeds.
Grateful.
@Chimzorom better like that. Dalu
@Ayodeji Lancaster don’t think so,
but stitching all that itches….
“They killed her as they can[could]”
Nice plot… theme.
Hmmm… Revenge. Ain’t that a bitch?
Ehn?..@babyada…It happens, stay in the village for one month, and your ears would be filled with unbelievable but true stories…
@ostar…Hmmm…I like…It’s a reasonable revenge, so i support adaku …I mean if we don’t get it in this world, the afterlife is there…
@Bubbllinna yeah, cos it takes only a bat, to know what it is to fell like a bat (the quining qualia).
She would not rest in peace, until they lay in pieces!!!
well done!!!!!!!!
Hail @empress sewande. Thank you.
@Afronuts consider it done,
I appreciate.
@ostar
Nice and deep poem…I think you need to give us the trivia behind this poem on this forum post:
http://www.naijastories.com/groups/general-writing/forum/topic/story-or-poetry-trivias/
Yeah! It’s been long I read @Ostar work. Wonderful message. Meaning absorbed.
Your’s boy, Lactoo.
Gracias et sapientia.
@Lactoo the Muse bless you
You shall lack nothing but would
soon be led to literary apotheosis!
@gooseberry thanks G, and B blessed
Amen.
Adaku… Beautiful poem.. Understood in more ways than one. Well done.
Read like one old Nollywood movie I watched like 10 years ago, when I used to watch them… Nice one, but na U na, hehehe.
@Gooseberry thanks for the beauty of your words.
@Raymond 10yrs a gooooooooo? Though ‘am not a
movietv type but I bet you 9ja movies rating from the
age, have come a long way.
Always proud of you guys.
Wonder what inspired this.
Really wonder what inspired this. It so graphic!
Well done mayne!!
Seun-Odukoya the violence I see
everywhere around the world, especially
the brutal massacre of the weaklings inspired
this. Aduka represents the victimized, the hunted
and those who will eventually triumph!
Thanks great Seun.