I am tired of everything
Glum to the sounds and flickers from the screen
I am now the Nanny in the house
Scrub this, cleanse that and sweep these
Wash, cook, press the clothes
Gardener left,
I tend to the flowers too
when the car horns
The gate beckons unto me
No one to chat with
No one to trouble a little
None to play with
I would have been whole and hale
If you were here with me
You would have hoist me piggyback
Swing me like a kite
Enter into a fight
Trashing cards
Tickling my side
Poking me
Cracking me up
Sowing warmth
Planting kisses
Reaping smiles
Savouring love
Through scented breathes
Gone away to the beach
waters tickle the sand’s ear
Under nature’s perspiration
Run against the tides
cower under the lush sands
minding the roaring currents
Wet my back, soothe my skin,
make me scream, untwine my braids
do the cards
We’ll play
‘Krosses n Knots
Scrabble, Chess and Draft
Beneath the cloud’s cushions
We’ll have blabbed and teased
Link ropes up
Run and dribble
Chant flavoured hymns
Watch the smiley clouds together
Hold hands and smile
Skip up and down and bop our heels
Your absence dulls my spirit
The poem is okay but could be better. I think it is a lil incomplete to me.
Ummm…Who is the persona longing for?..If she is the nanny/mother, does she long for her ward?..If yes, how then would the child, ‘hoist her piggyback?’…
Or is your persona, the child?..
Kinda confusing (maybe it’s just me)
Nice descriptions…Keep writing.
I quite agree with gooseberry that this seems incomplete.
I guess this is a woman longing for a child, but without a child what makes her a nanny?
You have a good point but it needs better establishment.
Incomplete.
It needs perhaps a word or a line or even a stanza, it definitely needs something more, to tell us who or what is the cause of the longing.
I am still smiling as I write this, this sums up my world writefight. Playing both mother and lover as only Mother earth truly could. I am so loving this!
I love this…reading the first few lines I thought, this is me…I enjoyed reading this and think this is about the loss of both lover as Dotta puts it or rather for me, husband and a child. The loss of these two people does not negate the reality of another child in existence, hence the nanny persona.
Deeply well thought and touching…keep writing.
seemed emotionally attached to mother.child relationship.
@ gooseberry, you have a deep eye.
@sibbylwhite: A lady wishing her partner was around
@Chimzorom: I actually took a part of it off, for copyright purpose.
Its not really like a mother and child thing. It is a therapy poem inspired by the distance between a couple.
@atumercy,kaycee,dotta,amor. Thnx plenty