My Regrets

My Regrets

I wish I had met you when the skies where blue

I wish I wasn’t healing from the bleeding scars

I wish I waited when I knew I started too early

I wish I waited a while, and then I would have met you

I wish I had the courage to face my feelings earlier

I wish I never had to make you shed those tears

I wish I never told you to love me just as a friend

I wish I had waited; maybe you will be right here

I wish you could see through my very white soul

I wish you were mine just like the sun in the sky

 

I pray you get to see the brightness in my love

I pray you forgive me for the silence in my heart

I pray you see we are two roads that never end

I pray you see we will make it through the storm

I pray you grow into me as I draw into your world

I pray you see that I will love you even when wrong

I pray you see that loving you is the perfect hope

I pray you hear the throbbing whispers in your heart

I pray this story ends with the blessings of heaven

I pray for forever as not just as a friend but my love

 



13 thoughts on “My Regrets” by Dekky (@Dekky)

  1. Uh…I really don’t know what to make of this. It just felt…bare…flat…void to me. No offense.

    I didn’t feel any of the emotions spoken about…

  2. Abegi!
    Make we hear word!

    1. No strong imagery

  3. “I pray” and “I wish”- the culprits whose multiple cloning blighted the beautiful things you said and tried to say.

  4. Dekky, this sound like a lyric. . . .even when others didnt give you mark. You deserve mine because it not easy my guy!

  5. I also liked this. Regrets can indeed be painful but sometimes they’re better than what we think we lost.

  6. you’ve got a message…a powerful one, bought the dispatch of the message is quite weak!

  7. I actually reread (rewrote in my mind) the poem without the “I wish” and “I pray” and realised you had very nice lines. Try and see if you’ll get some feel from the poem that way.

    Love your theme, it’s nice one. Love the message as well.

    Keep writing, you’re good. Just skip repetitive stuff like “I wish” and “I pray” next time.

  8. Excess repitition. You are good @dekky, u just have to understand that moderation pays. Theres nothing wrong in using ‘i wish’ and ‘i pray’ but u overused it. It killed the beauty.

    I felt your poem cos i understand. Try to make your lines less prosaic next time. Write more.

  9. Thanks every one the constructive Criticism is appreciated, will work more on my flaws..Thanks again..:)

  10. I regret you choose to spoil the imaginative ability of this poem with the repeated words. look at this again without the ‘i wish’ and ‘i pray’; it’ll be tighter and more impactful.
    Nice one. Cheers.

  11. ‘I wish I had met you when the skies where blue

    I wish I wasn’t healing from the bleeding scars

    I wish I waited when I knew I started too early

    I wish I waited a while, and then I would have met you’

    The last line kinda confused me.

    Hmm. Love sef, e sabi shak some people oh!

  12. Abi o! @Ray. For me, love is over-rated.

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