Komphort

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Oct 232011
 

I felt my heart burning,
yearning for this girl they call Comfort.
I wanted to dive in,
it’d be better to wait till she says ‘come forth’.
This must be love
else I wouldn’t dare buy her hand glove.

Many many things I want to do,
to do with her, but above all tell her,
tell her I want us to be ‘duo’,
tell her, I don’t want her to be far.
I guess I’m drowning in lust
someone please find my heart, ‘cos its lost.

Owh! Comfort
come forth, come lay your chest on mine,
think and dream of you; I really ought,
not minding even to stand on a line.
Press your lips to mine
and I’m sure to be lost in heaven divine.

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lactoo @louis

Avatar of lactooLactoo. A very determined teen writer, specializes more in teen fantasy. Akwaeze Louis, hails from south-east alongside Achebe and Adichie. Author 'The Rising Monster'. I just love writing. Currently working on my new fantasy series. Hope I didn't bore you with my post.

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  10 Responses to “Komphort”

  1. Avatar of Seun-Odukoya
    Seun-Odukoya @ says:
    October 24, 2011 at 4:03 am

    Hmm. And by “hand glove” I assume you mean ‘wedding ring’…or what?

    If that is what you meant it to mean, i think it’s too far reaching a metaphor.

    Nice though.

  2. Avatar of lactoo
    lactoo @ says:
    October 25, 2011 at 12:02 am

    Thanks Seun. ‘hand glove’ from the writer’s pespective means wedding ring.
    I was just fighting for the rhymes.

  3. Avatar of smartfingers
    smartfingers @ says:
    October 25, 2011 at 11:45 am

    nice rap!

  4. Avatar of lactoo
    lactoo @ says:
    October 25, 2011 at 11:55 am

    Thank you smartfingers.
    Albeit it was not a rap as you think. Its my nasty wishes. Fantasy about my dreamgirl. Although all is fiction.

  5. Avatar of adaobiokwy
    adaobiokwy @ says:
    October 25, 2011 at 6:26 pm

    really okay

  6. Avatar of lactoo
    lactoo @ says:
    October 26, 2011 at 3:06 am

    Thanks Adaobi. No doubt the poem is not that bad. Really okay, although its a teen fantasy, nasty wishes.

  7. Avatar of Myne
    Myne @ says:
    October 29, 2011 at 9:09 am

    The rhymes sound very forced, pulling the lines helter skelter. But the message is clear enough :)

  8. Avatar of lactoo
    lactoo @ says:
    October 29, 2011 at 10:24 am

    Thanks Whitman, the rhymes were forced but well calculated. just felt like expressing my naughty wishes.

  9. Avatar of lactoo
    lactoo @ says:
    October 30, 2011 at 6:40 am

    Hahaha, I just read it again and laughed

  10. Avatar of lactoo
    lactoo @ says:
    March 6, 2012 at 4:13 pm

    Yeah. Dude I know its been long buh i’m here now to set things right. @louis Lactoo the lactating kid is still rolling.

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