Naked

September 14, 2011    9.18 am

 

Before your eyes I revel and swivel

At your divine feet I must grovel

Me you took out from the unholy hovel

For my sins I am here waiting for your cudgel.

 

This night I wait;  and I must get

That upon which my mind is plainly set

Come and get me;  others I can’t let

Even when temptation threatens and makes me upset.

 

I stand before you quaking

Naked, my voice wailing

Tears flowing, here I am waiting

For redemption of my soul which is fast failing

Lord shelter me

For I am naked!

 

9.28 am

 

Merci.



26 thoughts on “Naked” by shaifamily (@shaifamily)

  1. dtitle suggested a different meaning, forgive my mind ;)
    Nice poem, i can totally relate..

  2. no mind shai, he just wanted to stray our thoughts ni! Goodwork!

    1. @Smartfingers I hope your mind didn’t stray too far? Hehehe.
      @Straightme Title was meant to, and then again there is a second, third and fourth meaning. As far as you can stretch your mind to accommodate.

  3. Shai, who pulled your clothes O°˚˚˚!.
    Nice work!

    1. @kaycee that íڪ btw D̶̲̥̅̊ rev. Father Απϑ his Lord.

  4. Shai, who pulled your clothes O°˚˚˚!.
    Nice work! Really impressive.

  5. nice work. the twist was well hidden. though i must wonder, what does the speaker mean when they say “Come and get me; others I can’t let” since the whole piece is addressed to the Lord.

    1. @crestor lines relates to struggle to resist D̶̲̥̅̊ temptation of falling into the hands of “palAtAble vices”. Following from D̶̲̥̅̊ dual meaning intended, could be backsliding into sin or falling into D̶̲̥̅̊ hand of negative vices Απϑ influences.

  6. Naked. Dual meaning.
    What were you about to do? :)

    Well done, Shai!

  7. Lovely poem, i liked the straight flow of thoughts.

    1. Thank u. Much appreciated.

  8. Before you concluded, I am sure God himself is pleased with you, calling on his redemption, expressed in such humble manner. I am short of words!!!

  9. This is dope though.

    Straight up dope.

    1. “dope”ke? For where??? lol.

      Thanks very much for appreciating.

      1. LOL.
        See this guy o.

        1. Oga mi sir, who tell ƔǒƲ I be “guy”?

  10. I’m smiling. Like the rhyming. Good one Shai Family…good one.

    1. U re eh? I was laughing reading this…..thanks.

  11. I liked this poem. For the same reasons as everyone else..cos at first I was like….oooh, and afterwards I was like ooooh still, lol. Me self I’m naked. Na God go clothe me.

    1. Bros, the Lord is with you.

      God bless u.

  12. Nce twist bro…E be like say U sabi dance Patra oh!

    1. Patra – can’t remember when last I heard her song. It íڪ abt soulja boy Απϑ D̶̲̥̅̊ likes these days. I have got M̶̲̥̅γ̲̣̣̥ eye on ƔǒƲ ooooo.

  13. Nice. I think the last two lines should have started another stanza to allow it a stronger impact. I don’t know why I don’t connect with the rhyming in this poem. I feel it was used to excess and watered down the strength of the poem…you know like when makeup intended to beautify ends up making less beautiful. It’s a hunch, but itwas still there even after I read twice.

    Keep writing.

    1. @Chemokopi well, sorry abt dt. It may not “deliver” what u crave.

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