Words to lonely soul

  7 Responses to “Words to lonely soul”

1. 

   morounmubo @ says:

   May 3, 2011 at 1:41 am

   Nice!!!
   Log in to Reply
2. 

   xikay @ says:

   May 3, 2011 at 9:12 am

   @akeem you have a lovely poem here, simple and sweet..
   only problem i have comes form the loss/mix up of the tenses and the absence of article ‘a’ in some places
   Log in to Reply
3. 

   Myne @ says:

   May 3, 2011 at 2:46 pm

   Short and poignant, but listen to xikay on those faults. He’s right.
   Log in to Reply
4. 

   Nnenna-Ihebom @ says:

   May 3, 2011 at 11:30 pm

   This is a sweet and nice -flowing piece of poetry. Like xikay said, there are some tense issues to be re-visited. For instance, danced and appealed on the second and fourth lines should be in the present tense. Down the lines, there are similar errors. The theme is philosophical and makes one think. kudos
   Log in to Reply
5. 

   Raymond @ says:

   May 6, 2011 at 4:21 pm

   Nice…
   Log in to Reply
6. 

   empress sewande @ says:

   May 10, 2011 at 11:45 am

   i like this pieace a lot
   Log in to Reply
7. 

   Seun-Odukoya @ says:

   July 13, 2011 at 3:43 am

   Simple. Short. Sweet.
   Log in to Reply