Late Night Trilogy (part 2)

Late Night Trilogy (part 2)

Okey had come to another defining moment in his life. He had come to what might be another turning point in his eventful existence. The handsome young man was relaxing beside the swimming pool of his girlfriend’s house sipping a glass of juice. She had gone inside to prepare the house for the night.

The first of such moments had been when his mother died. He was just 3 years then. Okey had been playing along the road with his puppy oblivious of an on-coming vehicle. His mom had spotted the danger and rushed to save her only child. She succeeded though she lost her life in the process. Okey, the poor child, was raised with the notion that he was responsible for his mother’s death. At the age of 5, he started having hallucinations of his mother. At first his father thought that it was just a phase in the little boy’s life but later found out from the family doctor that it was a disorder. A rare mental condition that is usually associated with suicide attempts. He was taken to a psychologist and after some time, the hallucinations stopped and Okey’s life was back to normal.

The second defining moment of Okey’s life was when he met Shola. Okey had grown up as the son of an average businessman. In high school, he was not rich but he was very handsome. So his height, jet black afro and pretty face made him to be one of the popular boys in school. He had his share of girls. At the age of 19, sleeping with girls to him was like sleeping. Okey was an avid womaniser, the girls loved him and they didn’t mind sharing him amongst themselves.

Then Okey met Shola. It was at one of the school’s parties that he saw the girl who was rumoured to be a transfer student. She was so beautiful with her long black hair and her pretty face. She had these oriental eyes that for some reason, reminded Okey of a painting by Michael Angelo he used to see when he was little. She had a nice long nose, soft small lips and of course, a figure that screamed nothing but provocation. She was rumoured to be the daughter of Ademola Banks, a hopelessly rich politician who was coming out for governor. Dating the girl was going to be quite a catch for Okey. He decided to go and talk to her. Okey was a skilled Don Juan. They just talked on that first day. The second day he saw her, he took her to the movies. The third day he saw her, he took her dancing. The fourth day was to a Spanish restaurant. The fifth day was to the school’s inter-house games. On the sixth day they argued and on the seventh day they had sex. After the seventh day, Okey was N500 richer and owned a motorbike. He had won the bet he made with his friends concerning Shola. After that was more sex and arguments, then Shola got pregnant. Okey was frantic. How could he be a father at the age of 19? What will happen to his career and his dreams? How was he going to approach his father with this news? He wanted the pregnancy aborted. He was lucky because that was also what Shola’s dad wanted, having an 18 year old daughter who was scandalously pregnant was not going to help him in his campaign. He agreed to the abortion of the pregnancy after which he would deal with Lucas. Lucas heard that Banks was coming for him and fled for dear life. He left his home and went to another city without telling anyone of his whereabouts. He began his new life there. School was now a closed door for him and he survived by the odd jobs he did and his pretty face.

It was 5 years later, when he got news that Shola was involved in an accident that his hallucinations returned. This time it wasn’t his mother he saw, but Shola. He maybe felt somehow responsible because of what he did to her. Even though Shola survived the accident, he kept having these hallucinations, his sickness had returned. Whenever he took a woman to bed, he would dream of Shola and would wake up to find her staring at him with an alarmed look on her face. The hallucinations became worse as the months flew by and almost drove Okey crazy. It was on the day one of his hallucinations spoke to him that he tried to commit suicide. He was then bundled to a mental home by his girlfriend at the time. This was where he spent the next 3 years of his life. From there, his girlfriend who belonged to one spiritualist group took him to her church were he was told that he he was being haunted by ancestral spirits. He was told that as a child, he was cursed and that his hallucinations was as a result of the evil spirits and demons that were haunting him. The prophets in the church exorcised him and he was told to live a holy life. That was exactly what he did for the next 2 years of his life. He finally broke up with his girlfriend and left the church. He then started going out with rich old women for their money. His dreams had been shattered but he still wanted to be successful. He didn’t sleep with them though. They weren’t so appealing to him and also he feared that his hallucinations would return.  From old women, he switched to young girls whom he swindled out of their rich parent’s money. Over the years Okey was still as handsome as he was before and the young girls still loved him.

It was in this business of his that he met Adaeze. She was the most beautiful girl he had seen since Shola. To his surprise and despite their age difference, Okey found himself falling in love with the young girl. Soon Adaeze was also in love with him. They started going out and doing everything lovers do except the one thing Lucas was now so afraid of, and they had set a date for it.

That night as Okey sat near the swimming pool looking at the starlit sky; he wondered if he was ready to welcome back his worst nightmare. Was Adaeze a good enough excuse for him to risk his sanity? His question was answered as she came out of the house. Yes. She was in a transparent night gown that showed Okey all the excuses he needed to risk his sanity.

“The room is ready.” she said stretching out her hand towards him. “Come.” Like a mule Okey followed…

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It was in his dreams that he heard the normal footsteps and opening of the door, he didn’t want to open his eyes but he did. His body was drenched with sweat and the goose pimples on his skin were as large as nuts. She stood there looking at him with that look of shock in those beautiful eyes of hers. She opened her mouth to speak but nothing came out. He was scared to death. He tried to calm himself down for he didn’t want to wake her up. He had to face his fears. He just kept staring at his apparition waiting, so scared. God! Was she beautiful, he thought. That was when it came to him. He noticed this Shola had added weight and was a shade darker. Her hair was different and what’s more, she had shopping bags in her hands.

Adaeze stirred and suddenly became wild awake.

“Mom!” she cried, “Why – I thought you travelled…” Shola just kept staring at Okey. Okey was confused only for a moment. He tried to speak but it was only gasps and gulps that escaped his lips.

“Okey” Shola said her voice as cold as ice. “So after all these years, you decided to show up in my life again by sleeping with my daughter.” Then she screamed so loudly Okey’s head began to throb. “OKECHUKWU YOU SLEPT WITH OUR DAUGHTER!”

It was these last words that finally knocked off the loose nuts on Okey’s brain, he just ran out of the bed, naked, straight to the window, knowing fully well that the house was a two storey building.



12 thoughts on “Late Night Trilogy (part 2)” by Andre (@andresuave)

  1. Is this the concluding part of this story? I still couldn’t make sense of it.

  2. i am really happy with the outcome of the story. very good. you did well with the story but i think you could have done better.

    keep it up and get better bro

  3. Andre (@andresuave)

    Yeah thanks guys… This is actually another story altogether. It’s different from the first one.

    1. okay. hope to see more of you. better ones too.

  4. Errr…Who is Lucas?

    ‘Okey was frantic. How could he be a father at the age of 19? What will happen to his career and his dreams? How was he going to approach his father with this news? He wanted the pregnancy aborted. He was lucky because that was also what Shola’s dad wanted, having an 18 year old daughter who was scandalously pregnant was not going to help him in his campaign. He agreed to the abortion of the pregnancy after which he would deal with Lucas. Lucas heard that Banks was coming for him and fled for dear life.’

    Check that.

    Too much ‘telling’. Not enough showing. This was not as good as I’d hoped. Work on this.

    1. You’re on point. Particularly…in the ‘showing’ and ‘telling’ part.

      But I like the story sha.

    2. Tola is correct…it felt like you were trying to tell us so much in so little a time…and the Luc thing…

      But I like the story. I like the characters. I like the ending.

      Well done.

  5. the end was worth it…you had some mix up some where which began to threaten the authenticity of the book..try reviewing it… nice one all the same.

  6. I spotted the ‘Lucas’ switch – I think you meant ‘Okey’.

    I think you tried to pack too much into the story, including bits which were not really critical to the story, like his time in church. I would have liked it better if you had shown more what was going on in the heads of the characters.

    But that was a nice twist at the end – I didn’t see that coming, especially because I believed that the pregnancy had been aborted. Well done!

  7. Andre (@andresuave)

    @Raymond: Oops… U got me. Lucas was the initial name of the character. It was bad editing. I guess i was too much in a hurry to post the story that i became a little careless. Ur corrections have been noted thanks..

    @Tola: Thanks a lot, i promise to work on myself.

    Thanks guys for your contributions. You guys are just the best.

  8. Very interesting story and it ended well but you got me all confused with Lucas and Banks? still a nice story.

  9. Good story Andre. You should be careful not to let little mistakes detract from your story. Check these out:

    ‘It was at one of the school’s parties that he saw the girl who was rumoured to be a transfer student.’…….it is either she was a transfer student or not.

    ‘ She was rumoured to be the daughter of Ademola Banks, a hopelessly rich politician who was coming out for governor. ‘……..That’s a bit of an overkill on the adverb.

    I believe the other issues have been pointed out. You know how to tell a story. With more work, you’ll get there!

    Well done!!!

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