The Stare

The Stare

In her black’s beauty,

Blank lay guilty…

In a poet’s mind,

Words became kind.

 

In her beam,

She’s more than she seem,

In words’ race,

She’s more than her face.

 

Some eyes see blank,

Converse of what her mind’s drank…

Courage knows no bound,

More than what’s found.

 

Darkness rages like a tempest,

She goes deep, deeper and deepest;

Her mind seeks more,

Lots of words to pore.

 

From Father comes hope,

Strength to cope…

The future, her gallant stare,

Until darkness knows dare!

 



18 thoughts on “The Stare” by 4ran6 (@4ran6)

  1. a very good poem…

  2. Omatayi, AGBA! It means bro, thanks…

  3. Thanks Austin…

  4. A good poem. Quite deep as well with an important message. Rhyming was a little rough around the bottom. But it was an enjoyable read.

  5. Noticed these few typos: “In her ‘black’ beauty.”

    “She’s more than she ‘seems’.”

    Nice poem though…

  6. @Jaywriter and Xikay, thanks… Let myself down in this piece, was forced to write it… That’s no excuse for the poor job though, would try improving it.
    @Scopeman, U’ve got good eyes bro… thanks!
    How abt ‘In black’s beauty,/ Blank lay guilty…/ In a poet’s mind,/ Words become kind…
    BLACK serves as symbolism… It typifies a black woman, an African with many worries…

    And ‘In charm and grit’s beams/ She’s more than she seems…’

    Thanks u all, I’m reli liking this…

  7. How abt this? Could use lots of help…

    In black’s beauty,
    Blank lay guilty…
    In a poet’s mind,
    Words become kind.

    In charm and grit’s beams,
    She’s more than she seems.
    In words’ race,
    She’s more than her face.

    Some eyes see blank,
    Converse of what her mind’s drank…
    Courage knows no bound,
    More than what’s found.

    Darkness rages like tempest…
    She’s been deep, deeper, maybe deepest.
    Her mind seeks more,
    Lots of words to pore.

    In children, hope,
    Strength to cope…
    The future, her gallant stare,
    Until darkness knows dare!

  8. now you’re talking man, definitely better…it works to re-write…you are good and can definitely be better…. WELL DONE!

  9. @Xikay, thanks man… U’d read more as I journey through good, better, until best…

  10. and we’ll be right there to share the laurel with you….keep going up

  11. U’re already worthy of being mentioned! Thanks…

  12. Hold on to ur seats people. We have a Poetry Giant in da house!
    Good skills bro. Nice lines, both the first and the 2nd poems.

  13. loved the second, though deciphering is kinda hard for me…..

    Well done!!!

  14. @Raymond, u no serious… I’m still an apprentice; here to learn everything that can be learnt. Thanks for finding time to read ur student’s work though…
    @Opeyemi, I understand wat u mean… I’m very open to questions, thanks for always finding time…

  15. If U be apprentice, then e don be for us aa. E mean say we never even start sef!

  16. @Raymond, y master wan deny student na? I not fit to sit with d best, only at their feet… Master, master, no more.

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