Short poems in A-minor

Short poems in A-minor

WHEN WE ARE BUTTERFLIES….
The soft pattering of an evening autumn shower
A soothing prelude to my lover’s entrance
whilst waiting, I deign a dip in the memories of still lingering touches
And drown when you leave me

The soft pattering of an evening autumn shower
What a soothing prelude to a broken heart.
And while pain shall rage like a summer storm
I hope to find you again when we are butterflies

THE MANY COLORS OF YOU
I had blues before the sun rose at noon,
Dined in the soft orange of your smile,
Laying down to the easing purple of your night.
When you leave in the morning,
Care a white rose you leave at my bedside
Less I wake-up coloured by the loss of your presence

TREAD SOFTLY…..
I have laid it all bare……heart, body and soul.
I have ripped it all out
And over here, over there, everywhere….it all lies

I have ripped out my insides and laid it all out.
And now I lie still, with everything I have held back from you
Strewn all over the floor..waiting…waiting….

…..tread softly.



17 thoughts on “Short poems in A-minor” by Eldee (@codrojac)

  1. reads very smoothly, it’s stuffs like this that assure me that I am in the right community, thumbs up Ld!

    1. Thanks Scopeman….

  2. beautiful…simply.

  3. Now this is very good poetry! Loved the second one most.

    Were these inspired by Alicia Keys ‘Songs in A minor’?

    Well done!!!

  4. Kinda like d twist in d lines… Lolz, it happens.

  5. this is as soft as a feather bed,…just wanna lie on it…well done

  6. I love the last oe. These poems are sensational.

  7. Short, simple and sexy. Very nice poems. Loved them.

  8. i am just seeing the meaning of the first poem today…the stanzas are a contrast of themselves. the same situation was like a lover’s penetration and at another time, it was a sign of heartbreak…hmmm perfect contrast.

    as for the last one, i am afraid saying THREAD SOFTLY does not mean that one before whom all was bared will heed

    1. Alas you see… ;) Thats good. Poetry doesn’t always “give” immediately upon consumption.

  9. Beautiful…absolutely beautiful. You remind me of why I fell in love with poetry at first. Thanks! :)

  10. @eldee. Esta es una hermosa poema! Simple yet amazing.
    There are not enough words to describe how these poems really come across to me…
    You’ve found your scale, El. You do write the minor so well. Keep at it.
    Bien hecho. $ß.

  11. @eldee. Esta es una hermosa poema! Simple yet amazing.
    There are not enough words to describe how these poems really come across to me…
    You’ve found your scale, El and you write the minor so well. Keep at it.
    Bien hecho. $ß.

    In other news… The dots you used are known as ellipses and is represented with just 3 dots.

    1. @sibbylwhyte

      lol @ In other news… ok noted. :p

  12. This is excellent poetry. The imagery is a labour of love. I love the first and second poems so much!

    Well done El.

  13. O-Money (@Omoniyi-Adeshola)

    @eldee, beautiful, beautiful…

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