30 thoughts on “A Kind of Bravery” by Myne (@Myne)

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    Ellie (@elly): Writer - 9148 pts

    @ 12 saying no to something wrong takes a lot of courage.Gangs- not a topic that has been explored much. I liked the flow, was carried along. when the seniors target you- serious boarding school stuff; brought back some memories. I hope this gets to the teens and young people it will make an impact on.

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      Myne (@Myne): Senior Scribe - 29179 pts

      Thanks Elly, I hope it makes sense to those reading. I wrote from the POV of a young child, but the truth is that bullying sometimes continues into adulthood.

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    Kukogho Iruesiri Samson (@xikay): Head Wordsmith - 49753 pts

    @myne, i’d say the greatest kinda courage as depicted by this story, is to be able to stick to what is write in the face of adversity…its really akind of bravery…i enjoyed the piece Myne…a few typos and the last sentence…???

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      Myne (@Myne): Senior Scribe - 29179 pts

      thanks Xikay, glad you got the message. You mean what is ‘right’? Don’t mind me, I’ll check out for my own typos too, LOL…

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    pensage (@pensage): Beginner - 760 pts

    Nice write…

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    writefight (@writefight): Scribe - 10742 pts

    Wow! This made a good read.

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    Idoko (@julemyles): Senior Scribe - 28418 pts

    Who noticed the beautiful rhythm in which this story flowed…? This is the kind of writing I get crazy about… Carefully written, I guess!

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      Myne (@Myne): Senior Scribe - 29179 pts

      Thanks Idoko. Yes I wrote this carefully, knowing that anyone could be reading. Still some typos escaped. :)

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    Jaywriter (@jaywriter): Junior Writer - 1804 pts

    If I was doing a film on this, will focus mainly on the phrase or sentence during the moral lesson that changed the boy’s mind. Even though not explored, that was the best part of the story for me. Really enjoyed reading this.

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      Myne (@Myne): Senior Scribe - 29179 pts

      You know Jay, in my mind that scene had greater prominence, and it wrote it like a paragraph or so. But I guess it got cut on the editing floor. :) Thanks for reading.

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    Scopeman (@scopeman60): Head Wordsmith - 50271 pts

    We are urged to always stand for what is right, even if we stand alone.
    Beautiful story Myne!

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      Myne (@Myne): Senior Scribe - 29179 pts

      Thank you Scopeman, Ahmed and Write-fight

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    neo-lite (@markwealth): Junior Writer - 3056 pts

    nice read, nice read. some typos, tense errors and omissions. @Myne and Idoko, it seems the strength of the message distracted everyone else i think i disagree with Idoko’s comment that it was ‘carefully written’.

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    Kukogho Iruesiri Samson (@xikay): Head Wordsmith - 49753 pts

    @neo-lite ans i disagree with you too….Y…even writers like Grisham have editors

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    neo-lite (@markwealth): Junior Writer - 3056 pts

    @Xik, u don’t understand my perspective. i’ve read Myne’s work and i know some of these errors were made cos she (maybe)was in a rush to put down her thoughts. e.g. 2nd par line 2: “Sweat BREAK out on his upper lip and he wiped at it with a balled fist as he increased his pace”
    and same paragraph, line 6: “Paul had started the group in their secondary school as a study group, but since they all lived in TH University”
    I’m just reading thru the comments and i see that even Myne attested to this fact so maybe i shldn’t have even mentioned it.

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      Myne (@Myne): Senior Scribe - 29179 pts

      I much appreciate your comments. I’m so ashamed of the “sweat break” OMG! I should do better than that. But like xikay said, I didn’t have my edtors go over this to polish my own self-editing.

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    Kukogho Iruesiri Samson (@xikay): Head Wordsmith - 49753 pts

    @neo-lite, you’re right, what i meant was that the typos r resilient viruses…, you do have a point sha

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    neo-lite (@markwealth): Junior Writer - 3056 pts

    @xikay, i dont have a point, i have 1847 and you my guy, u dey sell am? u get what? 12 million? lol.

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    ouduehi (@ouduehi): Newbie - 88 pts

    This is a nice piece myne. Good job.

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    Kukogho Iruesiri Samson (@xikay): Head Wordsmith - 49753 pts

    @neo-lite, sorry about that, if i hev not been donating points then i’d have that 12,000,000 you said…its just that i’m always online, its my job..online journalist so i use the time to NS just as u may FCBK

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    Sarah Ukot (@tokuharash): Writer - 5928 pts

    nice story. He was really brave. Usually, the bullied becomes a bully.Like some form of defense.

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    yejide kilanko (@yejide-kilanko): Writer - 5106 pts

    Myne,thanks for the quote at the beginning of the story. That for me, was like the icing on top of a yummy cake. I hear confraternities now recruit in secondary schools. I guess this is how it all starts.

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      Tola Odejayi (@TolaO): Wordsmith - 37126 pts

      Confraternities now recruit in secondary school? Now that is really scary!

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    Lawal Opeyemi Isaac (@easylife2): Scribe - 11107 pts

    i got too much into the story to notice any typos.

    This is very well written Myne.

    Well done!!!

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    hopegirl (@hopegirl): Newbie - 40 pts

    Well-done. Good morals too.

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    Tola Odejayi (@TolaO): Wordsmith - 37126 pts

    Great story which shows that sometimes, bravery is not about beating one’s chest and shouting out loud. There is such a thing as quiet bravery, and it’s usually more difficult to show this form of bravery, especially when there’s nobody to write a long, lyrical poem about your exploits.

    Well done, Myne.

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    irenecarew-bako (@irenecarewbako): Writer - 6468 pts

    For me it is the beautiful portrayal of the challenges of adolescence….innocence struggling against corruption, and the glimpse of a future great man in the making. Thanks Myne, for the beauty in the telling.

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    Seun-Odukoya (@Seun-Odukoya): Head Wordsmith - 103715 pts

    The story’s nice. I like the fact that the boy did not buckle under pressure.

    The typos made me smile. Nobody’s perfect after all.

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    Chetachi (@chetachi): Writer - 8079 pts

    thats more like it. Stick to what is right. It may hurt at first but you will be a happy person. Good job Myne!

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    innoalifa (@innoalifa): Head Wordsmith - 111954 pts

    an interesting read

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