The mask you’ve worn
For the past week or twenty years
Is probably not the real you
Or at least not at all of you
That is it the real You
Each of us has the potential
To be more of who we are
The soul that was given life
To make a contribution to the world
That is it the real You
The spirit with no concept of;
Fear, rejection, betrayal,
Or doubt the person who gives
Without need for recognition
That is it the real You
Lives without the need for approval
And loves because it is its own reward
Be yourself never another
Let your watch word be
Others may I can not
That is it the real You
Keep your head tall
Let your focus be where you are going
Cause the world gives room
For that individual who knows
Where he/she is going
Never follow the crowd
But stand out of the crowd
That is it the real You
No matter where you are
Never leave under the mask
But come off the mask discover the real you
Come out from obscurity of someone else
To your own full self of been yourself
Remember you are born original
Don’t die a photocopy ok!
That is it the real You
In succinct terms you said it well. Good piece
WELL DONE….its a GOOD piece you have here…
i have some problem though…
lines 4 and 5 kinda confuse me
That is it the real You
Each of us has the potential
secondly, [that is it the real you] shouldn’t there be a punctuation somewhere? like THAT IS IT[,] THE REAL YOU ?
thirdly, i don’t agree with this line in i a poem
Where he/she is going[ the / sign kinda makes it like an essay]
MAYBE I’M WRONG SHA
I think this reads more like a string of admonitions rather than poetry.The message it contains can be more direct if poetic devices are employed.
Well done!!!
@lawal, maybe just maybe
I no fit be photocopy oh!!! Thank U for this.
good massage sent! i grab it but in my opinion this piece would need so much work to become poetry. i ditto lawal. i like it for the massage though.
can some one help me get this thing straight: what is a poem? pls inbox me ppl coshincozor@yahoo.com or better still fbk me the name is okorie daniel adams uchechukwu
i wanna learn
Got the message. Great message. Didn’t quite get the flow. Wasn’t smooth while reading. Maybe you’ll work on the smoothness. Good effort though.
i think so too
I agree with jay here cuz it dint rili flow…..bt it doesn’t rip yur poem of it’s motivational message….nice one!
Even though the message was passed on, this piece still needs a lot of work. I keep saying that the beauty of poetry and indeed prose, lies in paying attention to details.