Nothing can be said, nothing can be written
Words will not shield me, words will not soothe me
The excruciating hurt, everything falling apart
Thoughts of what was, thoughts of what will never be again
There is a weight that can not be lifted
I can barely breathe
Around me a never-ending whirlwind
Where are the words I could have said?
Where are the words I needed to hear?
I am holding tears like jewels that can not be spilled
I am drowning
I can see the surface above me, so close
But I can not reach it
Hold me and make the world stop spinning
Hold me like you would cradle an infant
Touch me with the sound of your voice
I am raw
I can’t move
Screams are frozen inside me
Hold me so I am human again
Your love is what is keeping me here
Your love is the light I need to keep walking in the dark
Wow! This is intense! Very.
@Lade: Thanks.I tried to express what I was feeling recently.
The third line should be:
Words will not shield me, words will not soothe me.I guess I messes up when I was trying to post.
very good, esp the hidden meaning…quite engaging
Hmmmm!
nice it is!
@Brainy Poet: Thanks!
@Posh: Thanks!
I agree that this is a very intense poem. This is raw emotion at its best.I like these lines that say ‘The excruciating hurt, everything falling apart’ & ‘Screams are frozen inside me’. It truly captures the pain of love. Well done mate.
Can’t believe @lade-a missed something.
I always like works where the characters shows deep raw emotions. This poem did just that. Loved it.
I somehow sense a little something that’s hard to explain. The last line goes -
“Your love is the light I need to keep walking in the dark”
From the first line, she’s been in the ‘dark’. And the poem ends and she’s still in the dark. And I’m wondering, what’s gonna finally make her walk in the light? In a movie it’s usually called redemption, what’s her redemption?
And since @lade-a forgot to say, I’ll hole you, lol.
A poem from a deep part of you… Its deepness has the xtics of ambiguity… You have written it… It’s left for readers to cough out contrasting views… A powerful work indeed!
Nice. Really like the last line.
I am coming to a conclusion that is sincerity that makes writers achieve much with their writing. The ability to not withhold, but let the words flow from deep within.
@Jaywriter nice observation, i saw it too
@Scopeman i think i agree with you on this one
@Afro-Prince,@Jay,@Idoko,@Shope and @Scope: Thanks a lot! I really appreciate your comments.
@ Jay: time will be my redemption…;0)
I love this poem..
@ 2cute4u: thanks!
Sigh.
Again…nice one.
Hoooold meeeee
Beautiful…i felt this one deep inside…the lyrics remind me of Maxwell’s ‘Fistful of Tears’
‘Hold me and make the world stop spinning’ i love this and may borrow…DEEP!!!