Hope Lost

Hope Lost

Each time I rise to the morning of my African sun
My presence splits the rays into the many colors of life
And only reddish-purples escape the prism
Continuously reflected by the inviting mangrove Jacuzzis of oil spills
It is finally steadied by the lovely pictures of child soldiers
And I am blinded by the pulchritude of it all

Hence why I forever seek nightfall, the end of all things
Where I can shatter the myths in peaceful silence
For I doubt our hour was but a nanosecond
And the eventual triumph is but a promise to a broken heart



10 thoughts on “Hope Lost” by Eldee (@codrojac)

  1. I was about to say the poem sounds like loss of hope when i re-read the title, lol. It means you got the message across clearly.
    Nice one.

  2. Thanks Lade……..it’s an old piece I re-edited..
    Wanted to inject a whiff of sarcasm….does it come across?

  3. Hmn, LD, I think you are a very intelligent poet. I especially love this; cos I love the word pulchritude from Akeelah and the bee. Root word is pulchre meaning beautiful. This is a really beautiful poem. :)

    Sarcasm yes, although I’m thinking changing ‘lovely’ to something else would do the trick better.

    Well done! Don’t stop writing!

    1. Thanks Berry…yeah I do believe a different word order than lovely would have served my purposes better. Well like they say…. there is no such thing as a complete poem; when a poem is considered complete it can be said to be dead.

  4. Nice job.
    My favourite part of the poem:
    ‘Continuously reflected by the inviting mangrove Jacuzzis of oil spills
    It is finally steadied by the lovely pictures of child soldiers
    And I am blinded by the pulchritude of it all’
    I would have liked a longer poem so the theme could unfold better.

    1. Thanks…. I did write this originally with three verses but I felt the piece hadlost some of its’ essence hence its’ shorter length..

  5. Ld,you mush,this was brillant,ditto naijamum

  6. Well, now this is poetry! Thumbs up Otakpor!

  7. Short and concise, only stuff that LD can do.

    Well done!!!

    1. thanks bro….

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