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pyneapples @pyneapples
writer, screenwriter, artist and future martial artist (when I stop having migraines)...Go to pyneapples's profile, and read more of his/her posts.
wow!!!
nice one!
Nice one, I enjoyed this. This one of those perfect cliffhangers.
Touching end to the story
Well written, great begining and definitely a great ending. You write well. Good good job!
Wow..kept me hanging. Nice Job.
Very good… funny and touching at once!
Love the cantekerous man in the story! you write so well i was disappointed it ended so quickly…beautiful!
thanks everyone.
ha! i like it o. ‘specially the headache inducing grammar!
Beautiful piece…had me holdin my ribs to make sure dey dint crack at first then quickly sobered me up wt d denouement. Wonder what inspired this…
thanks. i was inspired by someone i met briefly many years ago.
A sad ending indeed; sobered me up.
Nice work!
This is so nice and so touching. That end took me by surprise.
funny man and a strange mother…pity him though.
what tragedies can do to a man..
very nice! @ d point u introduced d old woman, i began wondering if she a ghost, esp wen she said d stuff abt d man. very good.
p.s: y did u make d grammar-blowing man a professor na? isn’t dat a cliche? & incorrectly so, at dat.
This is a nice story but I suspect this must be an initial draft. I’m sure if you looked at itagain and again, you might be able to make it better. The intense begining, the humourous references and the touching end with a twist are the power of this story but I know that if you took time to look at it and make some changes you’ll make an unforgetable piece.
There are some parts that seemed detached but could be better.
Overall, I like the story, the humor and the touching twist!
nice one Pyneapples..keep it up
wow!…wht a story!..poor old woman..
Mama Andy’s only son…how sad.. lovely, poignant and precise..good job pyneapples.
For me,how the story worked itself to the title is what really knocked me off.Very good one!
Great flow, excellent detailing, well told!
I didn’t want it to end, very interesting.
hum…its an effluvium of revelation…reminds me of our own naija…nice piece.
Well done..this was well written!!!
Just saw this story on the anthology list , congratulations , you deserve it
I love this story because it was fun to read with all em big words and the characters innit…U deserve it, Ur story deserves that place on the anthology list..Congrats..
sad tale….