27 thoughts on “Every Wrinkle is a Story” by pyneapples (@pyneapples)

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    Beautiful (@Ruth-Iyayi): Beginner - 757 pts

    nice one!

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    Mazi Nwonwu (@Fredrick-chiagozie-Nwonwu): Scribe - 19067 pts

    Nice one, I enjoyed this. This one of those perfect cliffhangers.

  3. Adeyinka (@): Newbie - 0 pts

    Touching end to the story

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    Maid (@): Newbie - 417 pts

    Well written, great begining and definitely a great ending. You write well. Good good job!

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    Dekky (@Dekky): Junior Writer - 1244 pts

    Wow..kept me hanging. Nice Job.

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    Tola Odejayi (@TolaO): Head Wordsmith - 44102 pts

    Very good… funny and touching at once!

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    estrella (@estrella): Scribe - 18104 pts

    Love the cantekerous man in the story! you write so well i was disappointed it ended so quickly…beautiful!

  8. pyneapples (@): Newbie - 0 pts

    thanks everyone.

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    RemiRoy (@RemiRoy): Scribe - 12502 pts

    ha! i like it o. ‘specially the headache inducing grammar!

  10. Martin (@): Newbie - 0 pts

    Beautiful piece…had me holdin my ribs to make sure dey dint crack at first then quickly sobered me up wt d denouement. Wonder what inspired this…

  11. pyneapples (@): Newbie - 0 pts

    thanks. i was inspired by someone i met briefly many years ago.

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    abby (@abby): Junior Writer - 3807 pts

    A sad ending indeed; sobered me up.
    Nice work!

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    Lade (@Lade-A): Scribe - 16717 pts

    This is so nice and so touching. That end took me by surprise.

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    Anderson Paul (@Anderson-paul): Senior Scribe - 26559 pts

    funny man and a strange mother…pity him though.
    what tragedies can do to a man..

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    Ugo Chime (@Flourishing-Florida): Junior Writer - 4705 pts

    very nice! @ d point u introduced d old woman, i began wondering if she a ghost, esp wen she said d stuff abt d man. very good.

    p.s: y did u make d grammar-blowing man a professor na? isn’t dat a cliche? & incorrectly so, at dat.

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    Afronuts (@Afronuts): Head Wordsmith - 82721 pts

    This is a nice story but I suspect this must be an initial draft. I’m sure if you looked at itagain and again, you might be able to make it better. The intense begining, the humourous references and the touching end with a twist are the power of this story but I know that if you took time to look at it and make some changes you’ll make an unforgetable piece.

    There are some parts that seemed detached but could be better.

    Overall, I like the story, the humor and the touching twist!

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    Diva Divine (@divadivine): Junior Writer - 1553 pts

    nice one Pyneapples..keep it up

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    ediye (@ediye): Newbie - 0 pts

    wow!…wht a story!..poor old woman..

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    Mercy Ilevbare (@efearue): Junior Writer - 3437 pts

    Mama Andy’s only son…how sad.. lovely, poignant and precise..good job pyneapples.

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    Lawal Opeyemi Isaac (@easylife2): Scribe - 13793 pts

    For me,how the story worked itself to the title is what really knocked me off.Very good one!

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    doubleespresso (@doubleespresso): Scribe - 15169 pts

    Great flow, excellent detailing, well told!

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    barbara (@barbara): Beginner - 921 pts

    I didn’t want it to end, very interesting.

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    jlde (@jekyll): Beginner - 935 pts

    hum…its an effluvium of revelation…reminds me of our own naija…nice piece.

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    Kiah (@kiah): Head Wordsmith - 54801 pts

    Well done..this was well written!!!

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    aghoghosam (@aghoghosam): Scribe - 10199 pts

    Just saw this story on the anthology list , congratulations , you deserve it 🙂

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    Bubbllinna (@sibbylwhyte): Head Wordsmith - 125285 pts

    I love this story because it was fun to read with all em big words and the characters innit…U deserve it, Ur story deserves that place on the anthology list..Congrats..

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    Ono-Edosio (@Ono-Edosio): Junior Writer - 2675 pts

    sad tale….

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